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Comic 310 published on 339 Comments on Comic 310

Howdy, fellow Draconiacs!  RazorFox here.

Well, after pausing the story for a month to dole out some Christmas-themed goodness, and then taking a week off to finish up the 2013 Draconia Chronicles Calendar, we’re back to the main story with the first page of 2013.  Happy new year, by the way!  ^__^

When we last left off, Briella was not having any of Lady Red‘s special dispensations after Briella fell into the clutches of a pack of unruly Tigers.  Has Lady Red dodged a bad blue bullet?  Stay tuned…

Those of you looking for a soundtrack to this page can pull up “Radioactive” by Imagine Dragons.

As of today, orders are no longer being accepted for the 2013 Draconia Chronicles Calendar.  This is the first time in the calendar’s 13-year history that I’ve ever failed to get the calendar done before the start of its year, but so far, you all have been extraordinarily patient and understanding.  Thank you all so much!  I’m proud to say that the calendar is done, and went to the printers last week.  By the time next week’s comic page goes up, some of you will already have received your copies, and others will be on their way.  This year’s calendar also broke last year’s sales record!  Thanks so much for helping us grow!

With that, I’m beat.  This page was done in a surprisingly short amount of time due to the last of the calendar work.  I prefer to take my time on these, and that’s what I plan to do for page 311, but for now, I’m feeling the crush of a lot of nights of insufficient sleep.  I don’t mind, though.  You all are worth staying up for.  ^__^

Take care, my fellow Draconiacs, and thanks for reading!

=RazorFox.

339 Comments

Such a cute face in pnl 4! Under arrest!? I say Bri’s actions are appropriate! Then again, I’m still lookin for a big enough rock to pop the question to her 😉 They better call me in for jury duty! Very nice work Danny!

Well… Um… That’s certainly not the type of kiss I was imagining. But still black light magic, gives an epic feeling, now to see who will arrest Briella for flipping out. Also, I didn’t know she had heterochromia(odd-eye). O.o Wonderful…!

Yup! If you go back and check Briella’s past appearances, it’s always been there. Her right eye’s red, left eye’s blue. An homage to old 3-D glasses. ^__^

I saw one day, you could make a special, un-related to story(Because I refuse to say ‘non-canon’) image with Lady Red and Briella. However, I am just a humble(yeah right) fan. Still, I am regretful at the fact that I could have met you at the Anime convention in Virgina Beach. AMA 2010. I walked right past the table, but I was unable to face anyone directly. Still, I liked your poster, but unable to talk with those at table, I wrote down the e-mail address and have loved Draconia Chronicles ever since.

Sorry for the lame rant, in a nutshell, thank you for such an amazing comic.

Well… Um… That’s certainly not the type of kiss I was imagining. But still black light magic, gives an epic feeling, now to see who will arrest Briella for flipping out. Also, I didn’t know she had heterochromia(odd-eye). O.o Wonderful…!

Yup! If you go back and check Briella’s past appearances, it’s always been there. Her right eye’s red, left eye’s blue. An homage to old 3-D glasses. ^__^

I saw one day, you could make a special, un-related to story(Because I refuse to say ‘non-canon’) image with Lady Red and Briella. However, I am just a humble(yeah right) fan. Still, I am regretful at the fact that I could have met you at the Anime convention in Virgina Beach. AMA 2010. I walked right past the table, but I was unable to face anyone directly. Still, I liked your poster, but unable to talk with those at table, I wrote down the e-mail address and have loved Draconia Chronicles ever since.

Sorry for the lame rant, in a nutshell, thank you for such an amazing comic.

Well… Um… That’s certainly not the type of kiss I was imagining. But still black light magic, gives an epic feeling, now to see who will arrest Briella for flipping out. Also, I didn’t know she had heterochromia(odd-eye). O.o Wonderful…!

Yup! If you go back and check Briella’s past appearances, it’s always been there. Her right eye’s red, left eye’s blue. An homage to old 3-D glasses. ^__^

I saw one day, you could make a special, un-related to story(Because I refuse to say ‘non-canon’) image with Lady Red and Briella. However, I am just a humble(yeah right) fan. Still, I am regretful at the fact that I could have met you at the Anime convention in Virgina Beach. AMA 2010. I walked right past the table, but I was unable to face anyone directly. Still, I liked your poster, but unable to talk with those at table, I wrote down the e-mail address and have loved Draconia Chronicles ever since.

Sorry for the lame rant, in a nutshell, thank you for such an amazing comic.

If i were to guess, i’d say she was going to take her sight. With abudance of light.

And last panel. So anticlimatic. I love it XD

If i were to guess, i’d say she was going to take her sight. With abudance of light.

And last panel. So anticlimatic. I love it XD

If i were to guess, i’d say she was going to take her sight. With abudance of light.

And last panel. So anticlimatic. I love it XD

RazorFox, I hope you take time to read this comment but my late Christmas gift to you is a copy of my fanfiction that I don’t know if I’ll finish it. The next comment below houses it and I know it’s long but please copy and paste all of it onto a word document so you can share it with guests, friends, and members. Thank you.
P.S. I want my fanfic to be read by everyone, NOT for members only please!
Also P.S. I would be honored if you incorperated my fanfiction into your work or canon comic or made it into a bonus comic. And try guessing the references! It’s fun! 😉
Mr. E

Lumina and her mother lived in a large castle on a hill, overlooking the Dragon Capital. Lumina was found mostly training to use magicks with her nanny and seemingly only friend, Chiara while other times she kept to herself, usually drawing pictures and playing with her toys and My Little Dracony dolls as her mom ruled the Kingdom of Draconia with a sturdy hand. Life was simple, and they were both happy. That was, until the day Mt. Aet’na Erupted, sending the capital into chaos. At the same time, Kilani- a noble and cunning warrior who was already starting to become disillusioned with the war and with hate in general had invaded the castle and rescued her sister Kess, and her friends Shie and Riah. Pursued by the Queen Oscura, the intruders wandered about in the dungeons until they found Lumina along with an injured Chiara. Trying to defend herself, the young dragoness used her now-voluntary Light magicks in an attempt to ward off the tigers, Kilani though, recognized the girl as her adoptive daughter, whom she hatched and raised Lumina on her own in seclusion, caring for her as if the young dragon was her own. The moment their eyes met, something stirred within the young princess’ mind but quickly faded when Oscura intervened, snapping her back to reality. That night, she fell asleep with that same feeling buzzing about in her head. Days later, she had decided to throw a party, celebrating Chiara’s recovery, but when she drank her “beverage”, blackness and silence overtook her. Oscura, determined to end the war, had commissioned Dr. Lucis to wipe her memory so that the queen could train her to become the ultimate weapon and assure victory against the tiger tribe. Everything was set for the cleansing and looked like the queen was successful. However, a bitter battle between Briella and Lady Red was brought into Lucis’ room, causing everything to go astray. The resulting chaos caused Lucius to not only accidentally restore Lumina’s memories, but also linked the girl’s with Oscura’s. Lumina awoke from her stupor, screaming and backing away in fear from Oscura, exclaiming that she’s a soulless monster that knows no love and Kilani is her real mother, not her. After this heart-breaking out burst, Lumina uses a flash-bang magick attack to stun everyone, then flies off. After grabbing some food and her dolls, she then realizes she has to get out of the castle, however, she finds out she’s cornered in the throne room. Lumina, in a panic, scrambled about in the room, searching for a way out that doesn’t involve flying. Just when she was about to give up, she accidentally pressed a switch which revealed a trapdoor hidden behind the throne. Without hesitation, she ran toward her only means of escape, just as she heard the queen and her guards approaching, and then threw herself down into the unknown depths below. The trapdoor then closed itself, shutting out the source of calm light in the place of darkness. Little does Lumina know is that the failed mind wipe is causing her to have temporary ocular and auditory hallucinations which will force her to face droves of illusionary enemies, a lost sister, her fears, her conflicting memories, Draconia’s sins, and eventually, her “fake” mother…

Actually this story would or will make sense than BoI because…
The adventure would test Lumina’s broken heart to see if she really loves Oscura (despite knowing what she had done) and Kilani at the same time.
The Dracony dolls she brought with her would manifest as parts of her personality, I.e. Velvet Sun being her ‘love’ and compassion, Firestarter being her keen ‘eye’ and ‘quick’ cunning, Windwhistle as her ‘strength’ and courage, Lustershine as ‘both sides’ of her ever-increasing ‘power’ and desperation to seek the truth, and Flashbang as her lonely and ‘gothic’ side. (thumbs up to anyone who gets the allusions to BoIs’ playable characters!)
Lumina facing the Seven Deadly and Super Sins symbolizes her uncertainy that she can bring peace and absolve Draconia’s tribes for their misdeeds.
The Seven Sins take on the forms of various characters throughout the comic, Greed- Riah/Kighan, Sloth- Red/Aika, Envy- Sombrana/Scyde, Wrath- Kess/Xhanil/Elektra, Gluttony- Zurina/Inyx, Lust- Jiva/Rula/Naisha, Pride- Princess Kiriad/Briella/Edmund McMillen and Florian Himsel, and Oscura’s first phase involves using every sin’s moves before transforming into the “Mom” phase.
The Harbingers represent Draconia’s impending doom which Lumina strives to prevent from happening.
Shaliegh’s tent replaces the Devil room but would still follow the same AI, unlock patterns, and symbolism.
The monsters Lumina and “co.” fight symbolize her fears, nightmares, and images of both the tiger and dragon tribes warped from the failed cleansing process.
Lumina eventually meets with Gaia’s daughter locked in a cell and realizes that the lost, mistreated girl is the little sister she wished for due to the memory incident, but the scared and scarred child attacks Lumina (like Issac (boss)) out of fear due to not knowing anything but the princess comforts her using her kind heart and a song. In a touching moment, they both cry in each others’ shoulders, not only because they found each other after 6 years but because they wished everything would go back to normal.
I forgot to mention, Lumina doesn’t use tears as her main weapon, she uses her magick as the main weapon, but she can switch elements to her will, AFTER she finds a desired element.

However, Oscura soon finds the two and some serious stuff happens. (I’ll tell what happens in story form.)

Lumina and her sister were cornered.

Her mother, fueled with rage at seeing her daughter next to Gaia’s illegitimate spawn, was bearing down on them both. “Lumina get the HELL away from that literal spawn of a dritch!” she yelled to the princess. “Move aside!”

The sisters could see their own panic reflected in Oscura’s big, white eyes. Strange how they shared the same eyes; the big, yellow eyes that all of them shared, including the pompadour of brown hair. (Though Lumina’s mother was sporting less curl and more messy bedhead at the moment.)

(Lumina’s POV)
….. Fight…

A voice in her head said.

…Fight…attack her……you idiot, FIGHT…

A hand reached out, vehemently shoving Lumina aside. “I SAID MOVE ASIDE!! That lousy imp can NOT be let out!” The little light dragon tumbled on the floor and landed on her side. Picking herself up, she glanced back, the orange-yellow dragonling let out panicked whimpering noises, eyes fixated on the queen before her, pupils nearly pinpricks as fear and adrenaline coursed through her veins.

The earthie was pinned between Oscura and the wall behind her, chest heaving with heavy gasps. Lumina’s hallucination-filled mind suddenly no longer made her see a loving parent, but a horrific, sadistic monster.

…Fight.

“You …”

(Sister’s POV)
A hand slapped her cheek then grabbed her hair as her attacker uttered unintelligible noises (“You LITTLE BRAT! YOU should have NEVER been BORN!!), then threw her down and delivered a series of punches and kicks before finally grasping her throat with glowing hands, starving her of air.

(Lumina’s POV)
Attack!
“…just get away, getawaygetaway…”

She was hyperventilating by now, as her biological mother choked the feeble dragonling.
DO SOMETHING.
And then an image formed in her mind. An image of a shining, sharp hand; her protector, making a beckoning gesture. The voice within her mind whispered to her like a seductive lover, sounding so wrong but so right at the same time.
K…i…l…l…h…e…r…
Lumina hesitated. Part of her wanted to scream. Another, to take her sister and run. But yet another, considered the request.
…Kill her…..Before she kills your sibling…
Her mind was a maelstrom of conflicting thoughts, the young girl felt sick to her stomach and weak in the knees with the beat of her own heart pounding within her head.
Make…the…we…a…po…n…
She thought the image. Her left hand slowly contorted into a claw, trembling as part of her still warred, still tried to reason.
Make the weapon… Make it… Make it…
Tears streamed down her face, as her left arm gathered light magick and formed it into a clawed gauntlet, as if the frayed strands of her sanity knew what was happening, knew that it was fighting a battle it was going to lose.

DO IT.

She weakly stood up into a battle stance near her mother with shaky arms, her eyelids stained with dry saline, hiccuping between sobs. “Just leave her alone…please, Memei…just *hic* leave my sister alone!”

But Oscura wouldn’t listen or look at her daughter as she continued assaulting the helpless young earth dragon, she just said, “Lumina my sweet, I know you have a kind heart and I am proud of you for that… But I will NOT HAVE YOU ACCEPTING THIS DRITCH’S SPAWN AS YOUR SISTER!!”

She didn’t think. Her body acted on its own.

(Oscura’s POV)
“AAaagh!”
Oscura looked thunderstruck as Lumina heaved, frozen in mid-strike, the phantasmal blades of the magick-gauntlet dripping with red ichor. She collapsed, dropping the young earth dragon who scuttled to a corner. Clutching her stomach and dabbing at the wide cut, she looked at her own blood stained palm in shock.

(Lumina’s POV)
“Ma-Mai-see…wh-” “I told you *hic* to stay away from her… *gasp*…WHY COULDN’T YOU JUS’ STAY AWAY FROM US!? WHY COULDN’T YOU JUS’ LOVE US BOTH!?!?”

Kill her, Lumina…

“N-no, she’s my Memei…I c-can’t…I…I”

…KILL her…and the hurting, …the hurting, will stop…

“P-please…Memei…run…just run…oh gods Memei…*sob*, PLEASE don’t make me do this!”

Argh… KILL HER!!! KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL, KILL, KILL, KILL, KILL, KILL HER, KILL, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL H-

“YAAAAAAAAGGHHHH!!!!

What happened next was a blur, the memories fuzzy in Lumina’s mind.

(Oscura’s POV)
As Oscura tried to make sense of the sudden attack by her daughter and her odd ramblings, The princess let out a chilling mix between a wail and a scream, catching the queen off-guard as the dragonling lunged forward, spearing through her shoulder, shedding blood as the black dragoness fell to the ground.

Shock and surprise registered on Oscura’s face as she yelled in agony, blood hemorrhaging from that wound, staining her black and purple scales with the red hue of her life essence. She looked up to her daughter’s face and was actually scared by what she saw, Lumina bore a huge scowl and her eyes were angry and colorless whites save for tiny yellow dots with prick-sized pupils, “L-Lumina! WHAT ARE YOU DOING!? D-DON’T! NO!” she let out another swipe and cut her mother’s leg. Again and again that small silver bladed hand struck out, The white dragonling sobbing hysterically as she slashed at her highness again and again.

Through scale, through flesh, Oscura’s struggles slowly faded as her blood was spilt onto the floor of the Dungeon, pooling around her, splattering both the assailant and victim with that hot red fluid. “JUST LEAVE US ALONE!” Lumina screamed out through tears, fear turning to sorrow and rage. “YOU COULDN’T JUS’ GO AWAY, COULD YOU?! *swipe* YOU HAD TO KEEP COMING BACK, *cut* WHY DID’JA LOCK UP MY LITTLE SISTER, *swipe* WHY DID’JA TAKE ME AWAY FROM KILANI, *slash* WHY DID’JA ‘RASE MY MEM’RY *slash*, WHY DIDN’T’JA TELL ME ABOUT SIS’, *jab* WHY DID’JA BULLY HER, *slash* WHY ARE YOU SO MEAN!?!? *swipe* WHY!? *cut* WHY!? *jab* WHYYYYYY!?!?!?!?!?” Oscura tried to use magick to defend herself but her own daughter brought her foot down on her mother’s hand, sending a wave of pain coursing through her entire body, her eyes wide with terror as tears streamed down her face, visage frozen in a mix of fear, pain, and anguish.

Was her daughter right? Was really that horrible and heartless? Was she indeed a monster?

As her vision started to blur, she stared up at Lumina and saw the gauntlet dissipate into magick, but her daughter still acted like the weapon was still on her arm, her strikes grew slower and softer. Mustering some strength, Oscura spoke. “Lumina… PLEASE STOP! IT REALLY HURTS!” (Normally Oscura wouldn’t be the type to beg for mercy, but having her own daughter attack her to the point where she can’t fight back disturbed and horrified her greatly.) She then held up her hand. “Look at me… My body’s cut up badly, and my hand is broken… What should I do? My people are lost without me, they’re your people too, you can’t do this!” Lumina started to look less frightening and more solemn as her mother said the two words she never heard her say, “I’m Sorry… I’m Sorry! I’ll make it all up to you sweetie, I promise!…*whimper* Please Lumina, this isn’t you… I just want my sweet-girl back … Please… *sob* Please Mai-see… forgive me…”
She is lying… DOITDOITDOITDOITDOITDOITDOITDOITNOW!!!!!

Lumina then had an even scarier look on her face as she screamed “You’re lying… YOU’RE LYING! YOU JUS’ WANT TO TAKE CONTR’L OF MY HEAD AND TURN ME INTO A WEP’N OR A BEGITABL’!” Then with every strike, she said only one word. “*whack!* Die… *crack!* Die… *thud!* DIIIEE!!!”
The confused and scared child finally threw a jab that hit Oscura’s head, sending her into unconsciousness.

(Lumina’s POV)
Lumina heaved for breath, limbs shaking as her lucidity returned, making her fully conscious and gasped…

Blood stained her scales and wings, painting her a deep crimson, wearing the life force of her former mother like some Lovecraftian outfit. She sobbed, letting out a wail of anguish as she realized the gravity of what she had just done. Hands held her head, Lumina’s pupils became pinprick-sized. “Nooooo..nononoNONONOOO! I didn’t mean to…oh, no…what have I done?! WHAT DID I DO!?”

Lumina’s body shook as her chest heaved with each gut-wrenching cry of anguish, suddenly stumbling onto her knees, letting out a ear-piercing shriek of terror as the young dragon put her hands out in front of her and saw her palms.

Oscura’s blood and viscera coated them, dripping down through her person, a huge hole on her mother’s head laid before her eyes. She skittered backwards, slipping in the pool of blood of her own creation, slamming cheekfirst into the pile of gore before finally gaining purchase and dragging herself over to the corner from her ex-mother’s still form. She could see the red and feel the stickiness of the substance all over her body as her bladder mutinied on her, emptying its contents upon the floor next to her terrified sister. Her mind raced, thoughts running a mile a minute as she hiccuped, wide, terror filled eyes staring at the scene made by her own hand.

Murder.

She had committed murder. On one of her own mothers. She had killed Queen Oscura. The young princess then burst into tears… It was a living nightmare.

She grasped at her head, matting her brown, disheveled hair down with blood and ichor, the young princess curled into a fetal position on the floor as a frightened look spread across her face, whimpering disjointedly to herself. Voices within her mind clawed and whispered to her, as her fear and illusions reached their peak. Everything started to spin around her as time seemed to stand still for her, the last vestiges of her courage being plucked apart, one by one…until that final thread finally snapped.

Shadows started swirling wildly and everything shrunk and expanded repeatedly as the voices screamed in her head. She then imagined a swarm of arms grabbing her body and in places that made her feel worse as the voices got louder…
*”Sweet GIRL!” “CaALlLl… MEe… BaAaCK!!!” “SWEET girl!”
“You are NOT my sweet girl!” “LUmInA… WhY DiD yOU KiLl ME…?”
“MoNsteR!”*
“Stop…!”
*”You shouldn’t have done that…” “You’ve got no spine! “What have you done with my sweet girl!?” “MURDERER!”*
“I-I’m…not a murderer, it was an accident, I was scared, scared!”
*”Sou-ka…?” “!DlEiMvOeNd!” “The tears won’t stop… the tears won’t stop…”YOU’RE A… CO…WA…RD!” “Eeeeeviiiillll!!!” “Why Lumina…? WhY LumINa? WHY LUMINA!? WHY LUMINA?! HWY ULNIMA?! YWH MILAUN?! LWMAIHYNU?! “DIE…, DIE…, DIIIEE!!!” “One of us, Lumina! Wrath! Envy! Gluttony! Greed! Sloth! Lust! Pride! One of us, Seven Sins! Seven Sins! Draconia’s Sins! Oscura’s Sins! LUMINA’S SINS! SINS! SINS! SIN! SIN! SIN! SINNER! SINNER! SINNER! HAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHA!!!!!!!”*
This was too much for Lumina, as the tortured girl threw her head up high and screamed…
“AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!! MEMEI! MEEEEMEEEEIIII, H-HELP ME! I’M SCARED! AAGH IT HURTS, IT HUURRRTS!! STOP, STOOOOOOOOP… *Sob* *wail* PLEEEEEEEAAASE!!! SHRIIIIIEEEEEEK, KILANIIIIIIII!!!!!!!!!”

(Sister’s POV)
She was scared, this being who was kind to her had killed her tormentor, but started shaking and crying after she did that. Now her savior had curled up on her side, screaming in agony, for reasons she did not know. This frightened the child, now getting a feeling of fear, sympathy, and sadness, shuffled over to her new friend. Not knowing what to do, she suddenly got the familiar wetness in her vision, then nudged the white being while uttering a sound that surprised her. “…N-Ny-Nyuu…Nyuu? Nyuu… Nyuu…!”

(Lumina’s POV)
Just when she thought she was going to die of fright, Lumina felt a familiar warmth on her arm and heard a sound like the coo of a dove, “Nyuu…! Nyuuuu…!” she looked up and saw her sister looking at her with puffy, red, watery eyes, having a distressed look on her face. Lumina looked around, she noticed that the arms disappeared and the voices stopped, herself, her sister, and her mother’s “corpse” were the only ones in the dungeon. Unable to bear it any longer, she grabbed her sister and wept into her shoulder again for what seemed like 5 minutes…

(Sister’s POV)
She was hurt, this being was tormented like herself all this time… She wanted to run when the white thing brusquely wrapped her arms around her, but a mysterious warmth and the same feeling and wetness flowed inside her very being. She buckled to her knees, emitting the same sound as the white being on her shoulder, however, that sound had the power to break hearts… It was a lost baby’s cry… “Nyuuuaaa… Nyaaaa… Aahh…*hic* WAAAHHHH!! WAAAAHHH!! AAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!! AAAAAAAAAHHHHH!!”

Neither of them wanted to let go, but Lumina suddenly heard voices from deep within the dungeon corridors… “This must lead to the source of the noise!” “Perhaps her majesty and the Queen are there!” “I pray we’re not too late!” “Don’t worry Chiara, we’ll find her there!” “Hang on my liege! Help is on the way!” Fearful of what her mother’s friends might say and do to her when they see what happened, Lumina looked at her sister and agreed with her on one thing, they had to get out while they still could. Using her earth magick, Lumina broke a hole in the wall and saw she was on the other side of town, seeing mountains and trees as far as the eyes could see, and for the first time in what felt like a long time, embraced the outside air, feeling its comforting breeze and refreshing coolness. Making sure she still had her dolls with her, she lifted her sister into her arms using newfound strength and sprinted toward the opening, but before she was completely outside, she turned to her mother’s “lifeless” body with tears in her eyes, the sunlight shining behind her while she stood on the rubble. Her voice was barely louder than a whisper. “Goodbye Memei… I’ll miss you… *hic* I’m sorry…!” With that said, she ran faster than ever before despite the extra weight and never looked back, her tears glinting in the evening sunlight as she ran with her sister sleeping in her arms, heading into unknown lands…

Epilogue:
In reality, Oscura was knocked unconscious but Lumina’s hallucinations were so strong she thought she really killed her, Chiara and the other guards had managed to reach the deepest part of the dungeons and were standing next to the last door.
(Chiara): “Ok, it looks like this door leads to the last room, is everyone ready?”
(Kighan): “Chiara, this leads to the queen’s private dungeons! We aren’t allowed in there!”
(Red): “Well have YOU got any BETTER ideas!? We’ve searched everywhere!”
(Shaddig): “Red’s Right! This is the only place left we haven’t looked!”
(Cinder): “Screw the premises! Our majesties’ lives are on the line!”
(Kighan): “Sigh… OK. But don’t blame me if we get fired or worse!”
The team then entered the door and found that something was amiss.
(Shaddig): “Hey, It’s brighter in here than the rest of the dungeon, what gives?”
(Red): “Well we won’t find out standing here, come on!”
But when they eventually found the source, a terrible sight met their eyes…
(Shaddig): “GASP!! MY LEIGE!!!”
(Cinder): “OH GODS, WHERE’S LUMINA!?”
(Kighan): “Who DID this much damage!?”
(Red): “Eeeewwww! What did I just step in!?”
Chiara didn’t say anything, in fact she couldn’t speak. She rushed to the queen’s side to check if she was still alive. “She-She’s alive!”
“Oh thank gods!” “But WHO DID this!?” “Where’s the princess!?” “I don’t know! (is this urine!?) Try reviving her! Maybe we can get some clues! (wait… it’s fresh!)”
Chiara shook and yelled at Oscura to try and rouse her.

(Oscura’s POV)
“Agh… grr… ohh…”
Oscura awoke from a dreamless sleep. Her head was wracked with noise, pain coursed her body, and her vision was blurry. When she regained focus, she found she was still in the dungeon but her guards were by her side, looking at her with terrified but relieved expressions. “…Ch-Chiara… is that… you?”

(Chiara): “Oh thank gods, you’re awake! I thought you were dead!”
(Shaddig): “We heard a commotion and ran toward it as fast as we could!
(Kighan): “I don’t know who did this, but whoever did it shall PAY!”
(Cinder): “My Liege, can you tell us who did this to you?”
Oscura had a pained expression on her face as tears welled up in her eyes…
(Red): “Your majesty?”
Neither one of them could prepare for that moment, nor they would ever forget it…
(Oscura): “*sob* I-It was… *hic* L-*oh gods please let it be a nightmare…*
*gasp* IT WAS LUMINA, LUMINA!!!*wail* MY OWN BABY!!! *SOOB-HOB-HOB-HOOOOOB!!!!*”

(WOW… THAT is some HEAVY dark stuff…)

(Thumbs up to anyone who gets the anime/manga references, video game references, fanfiction references, and movie reference.)

Near the end of the fanfic, legit chapter, or bonus comic, they escape out of the castle and into a nearby forest. The Womb and Utero levels are replaced with the Forest and Lush Eden levels but still follow the same AI (if this was a game or fangame) and rules, but the enemies are replaced with realistic creatures than the womb and Utero enemies (same AI and programming) from BoI. (and the music Atempause is remixed to music you would hear while walking through an enchanted forest.)
They fall asleep after traveling far when night falls, but they both dream together.
They first dream of the Khalira, but as a Sheol-like place which is fitting considering the number of skeletons, this symbolizes that Lumina is tormented by the “horrible thing she did”, even though parts of the event were hallucinations.
The boss of the Khalira is Shaleigh, who starts off the battle by summoning a “Fallen” tiger then a “Fallen” dragon. After they are beaten, Shaleigh, shocks and horrifies the royal twins by transforming into Satan (in his BoI appearance no less!) and attacks the duo! This heavily hints that Oscura, Kiriad, and possibly many others had bargained with Shaleigh(Satan) and unkowingly wound up “selling their souls to the Devil”, all not knowing the fact that she(he) wants to rule all of Draconia! The Fallen Dragon and Fallen Tiger enemies represent the ghosts of dead tigers and dragons killed in battle that had dealed with Shaleigh(Satan) and are forced to “serve her(him)” for eternity.

After they beat Shaleigh(Satan), they then dream of the castle, but as a Cathedral which not only means the young dragons want to be together in the afterlife just in case they get killed during the war, but because Lumina feels like she is being judged for her actions by her ancestors.
The Angel room is replaced with Loessa’s Room but still follows the same AI and rules, except Loessa is found caressing an “unknown” angel in her arms.
The Issac battle is replaced, instead, the duo fights the “Daddy” Long Legs. At the end of the battle, the “Daddy” Long Legs coughs up a half of an orb then leaves, revealing a cell-door. This means that the “Daddy” Long Legs wanted to test Lumina and her Sister’s power.
The final dream involves the two exploring the cell that held Lumina’s half-sister, battling nightmare creatures, sins, and eventually, Lumina’s rising dark side.
After the chaotic battle, a glowing chest appears in place where Lumina’s evil was along with the other half of the mysterious orb, they put it together and it floats toward the chest and unlocks it, revealing a swath of light that envelops the two.

As soon as the light cleared up, they found themselves in a grassy field covered with flowers, wondering where they are. Not long after they thought that, the twins found the chest under a bonsai tree, alongside an Earth dragon; but this Earth dragon seemed pale and bright, giving her an angel-like appearance, she flew toward the twins and landed next to them. They were filled with fear but the angel comforted them in a soothing voice that seemed to be filled with sadness. “Shh… There there, don’t be afraid little ones.” The duo felt calmer then, but Lumina’s sister was curious, this angel looked a lot like her! Lumina, being inquisitive, asked “Who are you? In response, the angel handed Lumina a picture diary, then said, “Here, this will explain everything.”
The first page was of Lumina and Kilani, looking happy together without a care in the world. Lumina shook, trying to wipe away the tears that had fallen from her face non-stop throughout this nightmare. What she wouldn’t give to return to those days.
The next page was of her mom and dad, on a pleasant outing. Her father, a great elder dragon, and her mother, just as lovely as ever. She seemed a bit fuller-figured, even by typical mom standards. Lumina and her sister looked closer at the page, it said “Just found out we’re expecting! Six months ’til our egg comes, I can’t wait!”
Lumina couldn’t help but chuckle as the diary followed her train of memory. The next page was of Chiara and her, in a golden necklace, with sparkling pink garments and a crown to match. “I’m so proud of pip…She’s the cutest thing ever!”
She stared forever at the last few words scrawled on the back of her pageant page. “I love you, Pip!” She could almost hear her now, feel her wet kisses and extra-warm hugs as she would smile down at her. She was far from popular at school – hated, even, by the local bullies – but Mom was always there for her, despite what happened next, she still sharply remembered that day… She had tried to tune out their argument with her pictures, but had no choice but to listen when Oscura stormed over her, stepping on the picture she spent so long coloring. Harsh accusations and angry words were everywhere, something about Chiaras’ not her mother, rainbow eggs and not fitting for a princess. She even smashed the crown Lumina had worked so hard to win at the pageant…
She had chased her, imprisoned her lost sister in the deepest dungeon, tried to erase her memory…and yet, she still loved her, even though her own daughter killed her.
Granted, life was rough…even ignoring the Volcano thing. She didn’t have friends, and she wasn’t particularly good at much besides coloring and telling stories. But was that really enough to drill this look of sadness onto her face during certain nights?
Lumina nearly choked on the lump in her throat when the next pages turned. It showed her father yelling at her mother, gloomily staring, then watching him fly away, out of her life forever.
He called Oscura a tyrant; a sinner. Then he flew away, and she never saw him again.
The note on the page was a bit longer. “Dear Lumina, I’ll always love you, no matter what anyone says. Don’t let your father upset you – Mommy’s always here. XOXO”
If only that were true.
Lumina nearly dropped the book in fright when the next page turned. It was Oscura, with murder in her eyes and a figure’s throat in her hands. Quickly pushing the image away, she closed the book abruptly.
They wanted to stop looking, but felt the cold, but comforting hands of the angel on their shoulders. The angel nudged the diary. There were more pages. The story was not yet over.
The next page drove a cold chill up their spines, the page was of a figure that looked like the angel…but was in chains while a fight was occurring in the picture.
Lumina showed the picture to the angel. “What’s this?” she asked.
The angel made a flipping motion with her hand, as if signifying that her response was on the next page.
“What did I do wrong? What do I do? Where can I hide? All I wanted was a child to love and raise as my own! Dear Goddess, I’m not ready to die!”
When they looked up, the angel was gone, and there was one page left. It was a picture of the angel, curled up in a ball, crying and alone in a place that looked like the
Cathedral. There was only a single tear-stained sentence written: “What have I done?”
With the pages read, they turned their attention to the chest. It was a fine piece of construction – wood panels, with heavy steel along the top and corners to keep it sturdy, all brushed a sparkling gold, with a cross on the top…
That’s when Lumina realized the chest was the angel’s only home, because this was no chest… This, was a coffin.
In a panic, Lumina’s sister flung the top open. Inside, they found the angel, lying with her hands on her chest, just like a person in death.
And in that perfect moment, it all made sense. “…YOU’RE Gaia, aren’t you?”
“…Yes…”
The angel looked at them both from the inside, a sorry look in her dead, tearing-up eyes as she gave a solemn nod. No wonder her face carried that pale tint and her neck was red – it was the look of decapitation. This angel was indeed Gaia, mother of Lumina’s half-sister, the Gaia that had died when her head was cut off, just because she wanted a child.
Everything turned bright, and then they woke up the next day with tears in their eyes. Lumina, after much thought, made a decision, she knew what she had to do to stop all this…

And that is how it would make more sense than BoI.
(Copyright of Binding of Issac game goes to Edmund McMullen and Florian Himsl, Dracona Chronicles to RazorFox, all rights reserved to their individual owners.)

Okay, I’m sorry, but you can’t keep posting this huge manuscript each time. I really appreciate your taking the time to create a fanfic, and I’m sure it’s lovely, but quite frankly, I haven’t read it as I don’t have the time, and I don’t typically make it a point to read fanfics anyway. I’m too busy.

That said, consider this your final warning. I’ll leave up your post so that others can read it, but if you post it again in its entirety, I will have to ban you from my comments section. There are more appropriate places to post fanfics; within the comic’s comments section is not one of those places.

Furthermore, I will not incorporate your fanfic’s elements into my story. My story is MY story, not yours. Asking me to incorporate your story’s elements into mine is tantamount to robbing me of my right to tell the story the way I want to tell it. This is also why I don’t make a habit of reading fanfics–any similarities between my story and anything written in a fanfic becomes pure coincidence.

Finally, no, I will not make a comic adaptation of your fanfic. Do you know how much time it takes for me just to do one “Draconia Chronicles” page? I’m sorry, but no.

I’m sure your fanfic is quite lovely, and that you take a lot of pride in it, or you wouldn’t have posted it at least three times already. As a courtesy, I will leave it up for others to read, but if this pops up again, I will have to use the banhammer for the very first time.

Thanks.

I’m sorry, that will never happen again, but I must tell you, I tried to send you my fanfic through email on my IPad but it looks like you haven’t received it. So I decided to post it all here so you can copy it and paste it onto a word document to have for your own and to share with others, then delete the comment housing all my fanfic so everyone won’t have such a hard time. I’m sorry if I caused any trouble for everyone.
P.S. I wasn’t asking you to incorporate my fanfic into your story, I was offering.

RazorFox, I hope you take time to read this comment but my late Christmas gift to you is a copy of my fanfiction that I don’t know if I’ll finish it. The next comment below houses it and I know it’s long but please copy and paste all of it onto a word document so you can share it with guests, friends, and members. Thank you.
P.S. I want my fanfic to be read by everyone, NOT for members only please!
Also P.S. I would be honored if you incorperated my fanfiction into your work or canon comic or made it into a bonus comic. And try guessing the references! It’s fun! 😉
Mr. E

Lumina and her mother lived in a large castle on a hill, overlooking the Dragon Capital. Lumina was found mostly training to use magicks with her nanny and seemingly only friend, Chiara while other times she kept to herself, usually drawing pictures and playing with her toys and My Little Dracony dolls as her mom ruled the Kingdom of Draconia with a sturdy hand. Life was simple, and they were both happy. That was, until the day Mt. Aet’na Erupted, sending the capital into chaos. At the same time, Kilani- a noble and cunning warrior who was already starting to become disillusioned with the war and with hate in general had invaded the castle and rescued her sister Kess, and her friends Shie and Riah. Pursued by the Queen Oscura, the intruders wandered about in the dungeons until they found Lumina along with an injured Chiara. Trying to defend herself, the young dragoness used her now-voluntary Light magicks in an attempt to ward off the tigers, Kilani though, recognized the girl as her adoptive daughter, whom she hatched and raised Lumina on her own in seclusion, caring for her as if the young dragon was her own. The moment their eyes met, something stirred within the young princess’ mind but quickly faded when Oscura intervened, snapping her back to reality. That night, she fell asleep with that same feeling buzzing about in her head. Days later, she had decided to throw a party, celebrating Chiara’s recovery, but when she drank her “beverage”, blackness and silence overtook her. Oscura, determined to end the war, had commissioned Dr. Lucis to wipe her memory so that the queen could train her to become the ultimate weapon and assure victory against the tiger tribe. Everything was set for the cleansing and looked like the queen was successful. However, a bitter battle between Briella and Lady Red was brought into Lucis’ room, causing everything to go astray. The resulting chaos caused Lucius to not only accidentally restore Lumina’s memories, but also linked the girl’s with Oscura’s. Lumina awoke from her stupor, screaming and backing away in fear from Oscura, exclaiming that she’s a soulless monster that knows no love and Kilani is her real mother, not her. After this heart-breaking out burst, Lumina uses a flash-bang magick attack to stun everyone, then flies off. After grabbing some food and her dolls, she then realizes she has to get out of the castle, however, she finds out she’s cornered in the throne room. Lumina, in a panic, scrambled about in the room, searching for a way out that doesn’t involve flying. Just when she was about to give up, she accidentally pressed a switch which revealed a trapdoor hidden behind the throne. Without hesitation, she ran toward her only means of escape, just as she heard the queen and her guards approaching, and then threw herself down into the unknown depths below. The trapdoor then closed itself, shutting out the source of calm light in the place of darkness. Little does Lumina know is that the failed mind wipe is causing her to have temporary ocular and auditory hallucinations which will force her to face droves of illusionary enemies, a lost sister, her fears, her conflicting memories, Draconia’s sins, and eventually, her “fake” mother…

Actually this story would or will make sense than BoI because…
The adventure would test Lumina’s broken heart to see if she really loves Oscura (despite knowing what she had done) and Kilani at the same time.
The Dracony dolls she brought with her would manifest as parts of her personality, I.e. Velvet Sun being her ‘love’ and compassion, Firestarter being her keen ‘eye’ and ‘quick’ cunning, Windwhistle as her ‘strength’ and courage, Lustershine as ‘both sides’ of her ever-increasing ‘power’ and desperation to seek the truth, and Flashbang as her lonely and ‘gothic’ side. (thumbs up to anyone who gets the allusions to BoIs’ playable characters!)
Lumina facing the Seven Deadly and Super Sins symbolizes her uncertainy that she can bring peace and absolve Draconia’s tribes for their misdeeds.
The Seven Sins take on the forms of various characters throughout the comic, Greed- Riah/Kighan, Sloth- Red/Aika, Envy- Sombrana/Scyde, Wrath- Kess/Xhanil/Elektra, Gluttony- Zurina/Inyx, Lust- Jiva/Rula/Naisha, Pride- Princess Kiriad/Briella/Edmund McMillen and Florian Himsel, and Oscura’s first phase involves using every sin’s moves before transforming into the “Mom” phase.
The Harbingers represent Draconia’s impending doom which Lumina strives to prevent from happening.
Shaliegh’s tent replaces the Devil room but would still follow the same AI, unlock patterns, and symbolism.
The monsters Lumina and “co.” fight symbolize her fears, nightmares, and images of both the tiger and dragon tribes warped from the failed cleansing process.
Lumina eventually meets with Gaia’s daughter locked in a cell and realizes that the lost, mistreated girl is the little sister she wished for due to the memory incident, but the scared and scarred child attacks Lumina (like Issac (boss)) out of fear due to not knowing anything but the princess comforts her using her kind heart and a song. In a touching moment, they both cry in each others’ shoulders, not only because they found each other after 6 years but because they wished everything would go back to normal.
I forgot to mention, Lumina doesn’t use tears as her main weapon, she uses her magick as the main weapon, but she can switch elements to her will, AFTER she finds a desired element.

However, Oscura soon finds the two and some serious stuff happens. (I’ll tell what happens in story form.)

Lumina and her sister were cornered.

Her mother, fueled with rage at seeing her daughter next to Gaia’s illegitimate spawn, was bearing down on them both. “Lumina get the HELL away from that literal spawn of a dritch!” she yelled to the princess. “Move aside!”

The sisters could see their own panic reflected in Oscura’s big, white eyes. Strange how they shared the same eyes; the big, yellow eyes that all of them shared, including the pompadour of brown hair. (Though Lumina’s mother was sporting less curl and more messy bedhead at the moment.)

(Lumina’s POV)
….. Fight…

A voice in her head said.

…Fight…attack her……you idiot, FIGHT…

A hand reached out, vehemently shoving Lumina aside. “I SAID MOVE ASIDE!! That lousy imp can NOT be let out!” The little light dragon tumbled on the floor and landed on her side. Picking herself up, she glanced back, the orange-yellow dragonling let out panicked whimpering noises, eyes fixated on the queen before her, pupils nearly pinpricks as fear and adrenaline coursed through her veins.

The earthie was pinned between Oscura and the wall behind her, chest heaving with heavy gasps. Lumina’s hallucination-filled mind suddenly no longer made her see a loving parent, but a horrific, sadistic monster.

…Fight.

“You …”

(Sister’s POV)
A hand slapped her cheek then grabbed her hair as her attacker uttered unintelligible noises (“You LITTLE BRAT! YOU should have NEVER been BORN!!), then threw her down and delivered a series of punches and kicks before finally grasping her throat with glowing hands, starving her of air.

(Lumina’s POV)
Attack!
“…just get away, getawaygetaway…”

She was hyperventilating by now, as her biological mother choked the feeble dragonling.
DO SOMETHING.
And then an image formed in her mind. An image of a shining, sharp hand; her protector, making a beckoning gesture. The voice within her mind whispered to her like a seductive lover, sounding so wrong but so right at the same time.
K…i…l…l…h…e…r…
Lumina hesitated. Part of her wanted to scream. Another, to take her sister and run. But yet another, considered the request.
…Kill her…..Before she kills your sibling…
Her mind was a maelstrom of conflicting thoughts, the young girl felt sick to her stomach and weak in the knees with the beat of her own heart pounding within her head.
Make…the…we…a…po…n…
She thought the image. Her left hand slowly contorted into a claw, trembling as part of her still warred, still tried to reason.
Make the weapon… Make it… Make it…
Tears streamed down her face, as her left arm gathered light magick and formed it into a clawed gauntlet, as if the frayed strands of her sanity knew what was happening, knew that it was fighting a battle it was going to lose.

DO IT.

She weakly stood up into a battle stance near her mother with shaky arms, her eyelids stained with dry saline, hiccuping between sobs. “Just leave her alone…please, Memei…just *hic* leave my sister alone!”

But Oscura wouldn’t listen or look at her daughter as she continued assaulting the helpless young earth dragon, she just said, “Lumina my sweet, I know you have a kind heart and I am proud of you for that… But I will NOT HAVE YOU ACCEPTING THIS DRITCH’S SPAWN AS YOUR SISTER!!”

She didn’t think. Her body acted on its own.

(Oscura’s POV)
“AAaagh!”
Oscura looked thunderstruck as Lumina heaved, frozen in mid-strike, the phantasmal blades of the magick-gauntlet dripping with red ichor. She collapsed, dropping the young earth dragon who scuttled to a corner. Clutching her stomach and dabbing at the wide cut, she looked at her own blood stained palm in shock.

(Lumina’s POV)
“Ma-Mai-see…wh-” “I told you *hic* to stay away from her… *gasp*…WHY COULDN’T YOU JUS’ STAY AWAY FROM US!? WHY COULDN’T YOU JUS’ LOVE US BOTH!?!?”

Kill her, Lumina…

“N-no, she’s my Memei…I c-can’t…I…I”

…KILL her…and the hurting, …the hurting, will stop…

“P-please…Memei…run…just run…oh gods Memei…*sob*, PLEASE don’t make me do this!”

Argh… KILL HER!!! KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL, KILL, KILL, KILL, KILL, KILL HER, KILL, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL H-

“YAAAAAAAAGGHHHH!!!!

What happened next was a blur, the memories fuzzy in Lumina’s mind.

(Oscura’s POV)
As Oscura tried to make sense of the sudden attack by her daughter and her odd ramblings, The princess let out a chilling mix between a wail and a scream, catching the queen off-guard as the dragonling lunged forward, spearing through her shoulder, shedding blood as the black dragoness fell to the ground.

Shock and surprise registered on Oscura’s face as she yelled in agony, blood hemorrhaging from that wound, staining her black and purple scales with the red hue of her life essence. She looked up to her daughter’s face and was actually scared by what she saw, Lumina bore a huge scowl and her eyes were angry and colorless whites save for tiny yellow dots with prick-sized pupils, “L-Lumina! WHAT ARE YOU DOING!? D-DON’T! NO!” she let out another swipe and cut her mother’s leg. Again and again that small silver bladed hand struck out, The white dragonling sobbing hysterically as she slashed at her highness again and again.

Through scale, through flesh, Oscura’s struggles slowly faded as her blood was spilt onto the floor of the Dungeon, pooling around her, splattering both the assailant and victim with that hot red fluid. “JUST LEAVE US ALONE!” Lumina screamed out through tears, fear turning to sorrow and rage. “YOU COULDN’T JUS’ GO AWAY, COULD YOU?! *swipe* YOU HAD TO KEEP COMING BACK, *cut* WHY DID’JA LOCK UP MY LITTLE SISTER, *swipe* WHY DID’JA TAKE ME AWAY FROM KILANI, *slash* WHY DID’JA ‘RASE MY MEM’RY *slash*, WHY DIDN’T’JA TELL ME ABOUT SIS’, *jab* WHY DID’JA BULLY HER, *slash* WHY ARE YOU SO MEAN!?!? *swipe* WHY!? *cut* WHY!? *jab* WHYYYYYY!?!?!?!?!?” Oscura tried to use magick to defend herself but her own daughter brought her foot down on her mother’s hand, sending a wave of pain coursing through her entire body, her eyes wide with terror as tears streamed down her face, visage frozen in a mix of fear, pain, and anguish.

Was her daughter right? Was really that horrible and heartless? Was she indeed a monster?

As her vision started to blur, she stared up at Lumina and saw the gauntlet dissipate into magick, but her daughter still acted like the weapon was still on her arm, her strikes grew slower and softer. Mustering some strength, Oscura spoke. “Lumina… PLEASE STOP! IT REALLY HURTS!” (Normally Oscura wouldn’t be the type to beg for mercy, but having her own daughter attack her to the point where she can’t fight back disturbed and horrified her greatly.) She then held up her hand. “Look at me… My body’s cut up badly, and my hand is broken… What should I do? My people are lost without me, they’re your people too, you can’t do this!” Lumina started to look less frightening and more solemn as her mother said the two words she never heard her say, “I’m Sorry… I’m Sorry! I’ll make it all up to you sweetie, I promise!…*whimper* Please Lumina, this isn’t you… I just want my sweet-girl back … Please… *sob* Please Mai-see… forgive me…”
She is lying… DOITDOITDOITDOITDOITDOITDOITDOITNOW!!!!!

Lumina then had an even scarier look on her face as she screamed “You’re lying… YOU’RE LYING! YOU JUS’ WANT TO TAKE CONTR’L OF MY HEAD AND TURN ME INTO A WEP’N OR A BEGITABL’!” Then with every strike, she said only one word. “*whack!* Die… *crack!* Die… *thud!* DIIIEE!!!”
The confused and scared child finally threw a jab that hit Oscura’s head, sending her into unconsciousness.

(Lumina’s POV)
Lumina heaved for breath, limbs shaking as her lucidity returned, making her fully conscious and gasped…

Blood stained her scales and wings, painting her a deep crimson, wearing the life force of her former mother like some Lovecraftian outfit. She sobbed, letting out a wail of anguish as she realized the gravity of what she had just done. Hands held her head, Lumina’s pupils became pinprick-sized. “Nooooo..nononoNONONOOO! I didn’t mean to…oh, no…what have I done?! WHAT DID I DO!?”

Lumina’s body shook as her chest heaved with each gut-wrenching cry of anguish, suddenly stumbling onto her knees, letting out a ear-piercing shriek of terror as the young dragon put her hands out in front of her and saw her palms.

Oscura’s blood and viscera coated them, dripping down through her person, a huge hole on her mother’s head laid before her eyes. She skittered backwards, slipping in the pool of blood of her own creation, slamming cheekfirst into the pile of gore before finally gaining purchase and dragging herself over to the corner from her ex-mother’s still form. She could see the red and feel the stickiness of the substance all over her body as her bladder mutinied on her, emptying its contents upon the floor next to her terrified sister. Her mind raced, thoughts running a mile a minute as she hiccuped, wide, terror filled eyes staring at the scene made by her own hand.

Murder.

She had committed murder. On one of her own mothers. She had killed Queen Oscura. The young princess then burst into tears… It was a living nightmare.

She grasped at her head, matting her brown, disheveled hair down with blood and ichor, the young princess curled into a fetal position on the floor as a frightened look spread across her face, whimpering disjointedly to herself. Voices within her mind clawed and whispered to her, as her fear and illusions reached their peak. Everything started to spin around her as time seemed to stand still for her, the last vestiges of her courage being plucked apart, one by one…until that final thread finally snapped.

Shadows started swirling wildly and everything shrunk and expanded repeatedly as the voices screamed in her head. She then imagined a swarm of arms grabbing her body and in places that made her feel worse as the voices got louder…
*”Sweet GIRL!” “CaALlLl… MEe… BaAaCK!!!” “SWEET girl!”
“You are NOT my sweet girl!” “LUmInA… WhY DiD yOU KiLl ME…?”
“MoNsteR!”*
“Stop…!”
*”You shouldn’t have done that…” “You’ve got no spine! “What have you done with my sweet girl!?” “MURDERER!”*
“I-I’m…not a murderer, it was an accident, I was scared, scared!”
*”Sou-ka…?” “!DlEiMvOeNd!” “The tears won’t stop… the tears won’t stop…”YOU’RE A… CO…WA…RD!” “Eeeeeviiiillll!!!” “Why Lumina…? WhY LumINa? WHY LUMINA!? WHY LUMINA?! HWY ULNIMA?! YWH MILAUN?! LWMAIHYNU?! “DIE…, DIE…, DIIIEE!!!” “One of us, Lumina! Wrath! Envy! Gluttony! Greed! Sloth! Lust! Pride! One of us, Seven Sins! Seven Sins! Draconia’s Sins! Oscura’s Sins! LUMINA’S SINS! SINS! SINS! SIN! SIN! SIN! SINNER! SINNER! SINNER! HAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHA!!!!!!!”*
This was too much for Lumina, as the tortured girl threw her head up high and screamed…
“AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!! MEMEI! MEEEEMEEEEIIII, H-HELP ME! I’M SCARED! AAGH IT HURTS, IT HUURRRTS!! STOP, STOOOOOOOOP… *Sob* *wail* PLEEEEEEEAAASE!!! SHRIIIIIEEEEEEK, KILANIIIIIIII!!!!!!!!!”

(Sister’s POV)
She was scared, this being who was kind to her had killed her tormentor, but started shaking and crying after she did that. Now her savior had curled up on her side, screaming in agony, for reasons she did not know. This frightened the child, now getting a feeling of fear, sympathy, and sadness, shuffled over to her new friend. Not knowing what to do, she suddenly got the familiar wetness in her vision, then nudged the white being while uttering a sound that surprised her. “…N-Ny-Nyuu…Nyuu? Nyuu… Nyuu…!”

(Lumina’s POV)
Just when she thought she was going to die of fright, Lumina felt a familiar warmth on her arm and heard a sound like the coo of a dove, “Nyuu…! Nyuuuu…!” she looked up and saw her sister looking at her with puffy, red, watery eyes, having a distressed look on her face. Lumina looked around, she noticed that the arms disappeared and the voices stopped, herself, her sister, and her mother’s “corpse” were the only ones in the dungeon. Unable to bear it any longer, she grabbed her sister and wept into her shoulder again for what seemed like 5 minutes…

(Sister’s POV)
She was hurt, this being was tormented like herself all this time… She wanted to run when the white thing brusquely wrapped her arms around her, but a mysterious warmth and the same feeling and wetness flowed inside her very being. She buckled to her knees, emitting the same sound as the white being on her shoulder, however, that sound had the power to break hearts… It was a lost baby’s cry… “Nyuuuaaa… Nyaaaa… Aahh…*hic* WAAAHHHH!! WAAAAHHH!! AAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!! AAAAAAAAAHHHHH!!”

Neither of them wanted to let go, but Lumina suddenly heard voices from deep within the dungeon corridors… “This must lead to the source of the noise!” “Perhaps her majesty and the Queen are there!” “I pray we’re not too late!” “Don’t worry Chiara, we’ll find her there!” “Hang on my liege! Help is on the way!” Fearful of what her mother’s friends might say and do to her when they see what happened, Lumina looked at her sister and agreed with her on one thing, they had to get out while they still could. Using her earth magick, Lumina broke a hole in the wall and saw she was on the other side of town, seeing mountains and trees as far as the eyes could see, and for the first time in what felt like a long time, embraced the outside air, feeling its comforting breeze and refreshing coolness. Making sure she still had her dolls with her, she lifted her sister into her arms using newfound strength and sprinted toward the opening, but before she was completely outside, she turned to her mother’s “lifeless” body with tears in her eyes, the sunlight shining behind her while she stood on the rubble. Her voice was barely louder than a whisper. “Goodbye Memei… I’ll miss you… *hic* I’m sorry…!” With that said, she ran faster than ever before despite the extra weight and never looked back, her tears glinting in the evening sunlight as she ran with her sister sleeping in her arms, heading into unknown lands…

Epilogue:
In reality, Oscura was knocked unconscious but Lumina’s hallucinations were so strong she thought she really killed her, Chiara and the other guards had managed to reach the deepest part of the dungeons and were standing next to the last door.
(Chiara): “Ok, it looks like this door leads to the last room, is everyone ready?”
(Kighan): “Chiara, this leads to the queen’s private dungeons! We aren’t allowed in there!”
(Red): “Well have YOU got any BETTER ideas!? We’ve searched everywhere!”
(Shaddig): “Red’s Right! This is the only place left we haven’t looked!”
(Cinder): “Screw the premises! Our majesties’ lives are on the line!”
(Kighan): “Sigh… OK. But don’t blame me if we get fired or worse!”
The team then entered the door and found that something was amiss.
(Shaddig): “Hey, It’s brighter in here than the rest of the dungeon, what gives?”
(Red): “Well we won’t find out standing here, come on!”
But when they eventually found the source, a terrible sight met their eyes…
(Shaddig): “GASP!! MY LEIGE!!!”
(Cinder): “OH GODS, WHERE’S LUMINA!?”
(Kighan): “Who DID this much damage!?”
(Red): “Eeeewwww! What did I just step in!?”
Chiara didn’t say anything, in fact she couldn’t speak. She rushed to the queen’s side to check if she was still alive. “She-She’s alive!”
“Oh thank gods!” “But WHO DID this!?” “Where’s the princess!?” “I don’t know! (is this urine!?) Try reviving her! Maybe we can get some clues! (wait… it’s fresh!)”
Chiara shook and yelled at Oscura to try and rouse her.

(Oscura’s POV)
“Agh… grr… ohh…”
Oscura awoke from a dreamless sleep. Her head was wracked with noise, pain coursed her body, and her vision was blurry. When she regained focus, she found she was still in the dungeon but her guards were by her side, looking at her with terrified but relieved expressions. “…Ch-Chiara… is that… you?”

(Chiara): “Oh thank gods, you’re awake! I thought you were dead!”
(Shaddig): “We heard a commotion and ran toward it as fast as we could!
(Kighan): “I don’t know who did this, but whoever did it shall PAY!”
(Cinder): “My Liege, can you tell us who did this to you?”
Oscura had a pained expression on her face as tears welled up in her eyes…
(Red): “Your majesty?”
Neither one of them could prepare for that moment, nor they would ever forget it…
(Oscura): “*sob* I-It was… *hic* L-*oh gods please let it be a nightmare…*
*gasp* IT WAS LUMINA, LUMINA!!!*wail* MY OWN BABY!!! *SOOB-HOB-HOB-HOOOOOB!!!!*”

(WOW… THAT is some HEAVY dark stuff…)

(Thumbs up to anyone who gets the anime/manga references, video game references, fanfiction references, and movie reference.)

Near the end of the fanfic, legit chapter, or bonus comic, they escape out of the castle and into a nearby forest. The Womb and Utero levels are replaced with the Forest and Lush Eden levels but still follow the same AI (if this was a game or fangame) and rules, but the enemies are replaced with realistic creatures than the womb and Utero enemies (same AI and programming) from BoI. (and the music Atempause is remixed to music you would hear while walking through an enchanted forest.)
They fall asleep after traveling far when night falls, but they both dream together.
They first dream of the Khalira, but as a Sheol-like place which is fitting considering the number of skeletons, this symbolizes that Lumina is tormented by the “horrible thing she did”, even though parts of the event were hallucinations.
The boss of the Khalira is Shaleigh, who starts off the battle by summoning a “Fallen” tiger then a “Fallen” dragon. After they are beaten, Shaleigh, shocks and horrifies the royal twins by transforming into Satan (in his BoI appearance no less!) and attacks the duo! This heavily hints that Oscura, Kiriad, and possibly many others had bargained with Shaleigh(Satan) and unkowingly wound up “selling their souls to the Devil”, all not knowing the fact that she(he) wants to rule all of Draconia! The Fallen Dragon and Fallen Tiger enemies represent the ghosts of dead tigers and dragons killed in battle that had dealed with Shaleigh(Satan) and are forced to “serve her(him)” for eternity.

After they beat Shaleigh(Satan), they then dream of the castle, but as a Cathedral which not only means the young dragons want to be together in the afterlife just in case they get killed during the war, but because Lumina feels like she is being judged for her actions by her ancestors.
The Angel room is replaced with Loessa’s Room but still follows the same AI and rules, except Loessa is found caressing an “unknown” angel in her arms.
The Issac battle is replaced, instead, the duo fights the “Daddy” Long Legs. At the end of the battle, the “Daddy” Long Legs coughs up a half of an orb then leaves, revealing a cell-door. This means that the “Daddy” Long Legs wanted to test Lumina and her Sister’s power.
The final dream involves the two exploring the cell that held Lumina’s half-sister, battling nightmare creatures, sins, and eventually, Lumina’s rising dark side.
After the chaotic battle, a glowing chest appears in place where Lumina’s evil was along with the other half of the mysterious orb, they put it together and it floats toward the chest and unlocks it, revealing a swath of light that envelops the two.

As soon as the light cleared up, they found themselves in a grassy field covered with flowers, wondering where they are. Not long after they thought that, the twins found the chest under a bonsai tree, alongside an Earth dragon; but this Earth dragon seemed pale and bright, giving her an angel-like appearance, she flew toward the twins and landed next to them. They were filled with fear but the angel comforted them in a soothing voice that seemed to be filled with sadness. “Shh… There there, don’t be afraid little ones.” The duo felt calmer then, but Lumina’s sister was curious, this angel looked a lot like her! Lumina, being inquisitive, asked “Who are you? In response, the angel handed Lumina a picture diary, then said, “Here, this will explain everything.”
The first page was of Lumina and Kilani, looking happy together without a care in the world. Lumina shook, trying to wipe away the tears that had fallen from her face non-stop throughout this nightmare. What she wouldn’t give to return to those days.
The next page was of her mom and dad, on a pleasant outing. Her father, a great elder dragon, and her mother, just as lovely as ever. She seemed a bit fuller-figured, even by typical mom standards. Lumina and her sister looked closer at the page, it said “Just found out we’re expecting! Six months ’til our egg comes, I can’t wait!”
Lumina couldn’t help but chuckle as the diary followed her train of memory. The next page was of Chiara and her, in a golden necklace, with sparkling pink garments and a crown to match. “I’m so proud of pip…She’s the cutest thing ever!”
She stared forever at the last few words scrawled on the back of her pageant page. “I love you, Pip!” She could almost hear her now, feel her wet kisses and extra-warm hugs as she would smile down at her. She was far from popular at school – hated, even, by the local bullies – but Mom was always there for her, despite what happened next, she still sharply remembered that day… She had tried to tune out their argument with her pictures, but had no choice but to listen when Oscura stormed over her, stepping on the picture she spent so long coloring. Harsh accusations and angry words were everywhere, something about Chiaras’ not her mother, rainbow eggs and not fitting for a princess. She even smashed the crown Lumina had worked so hard to win at the pageant…
She had chased her, imprisoned her lost sister in the deepest dungeon, tried to erase her memory…and yet, she still loved her, even though her own daughter killed her.
Granted, life was rough…even ignoring the Volcano thing. She didn’t have friends, and she wasn’t particularly good at much besides coloring and telling stories. But was that really enough to drill this look of sadness onto her face during certain nights?
Lumina nearly choked on the lump in her throat when the next pages turned. It showed her father yelling at her mother, gloomily staring, then watching him fly away, out of her life forever.
He called Oscura a tyrant; a sinner. Then he flew away, and she never saw him again.
The note on the page was a bit longer. “Dear Lumina, I’ll always love you, no matter what anyone says. Don’t let your father upset you – Mommy’s always here. XOXO”
If only that were true.
Lumina nearly dropped the book in fright when the next page turned. It was Oscura, with murder in her eyes and a figure’s throat in her hands. Quickly pushing the image away, she closed the book abruptly.
They wanted to stop looking, but felt the cold, but comforting hands of the angel on their shoulders. The angel nudged the diary. There were more pages. The story was not yet over.
The next page drove a cold chill up their spines, the page was of a figure that looked like the angel…but was in chains while a fight was occurring in the picture.
Lumina showed the picture to the angel. “What’s this?” she asked.
The angel made a flipping motion with her hand, as if signifying that her response was on the next page.
“What did I do wrong? What do I do? Where can I hide? All I wanted was a child to love and raise as my own! Dear Goddess, I’m not ready to die!”
When they looked up, the angel was gone, and there was one page left. It was a picture of the angel, curled up in a ball, crying and alone in a place that looked like the
Cathedral. There was only a single tear-stained sentence written: “What have I done?”
With the pages read, they turned their attention to the chest. It was a fine piece of construction – wood panels, with heavy steel along the top and corners to keep it sturdy, all brushed a sparkling gold, with a cross on the top…
That’s when Lumina realized the chest was the angel’s only home, because this was no chest… This, was a coffin.
In a panic, Lumina’s sister flung the top open. Inside, they found the angel, lying with her hands on her chest, just like a person in death.
And in that perfect moment, it all made sense. “…YOU’RE Gaia, aren’t you?”
“…Yes…”
The angel looked at them both from the inside, a sorry look in her dead, tearing-up eyes as she gave a solemn nod. No wonder her face carried that pale tint and her neck was red – it was the look of decapitation. This angel was indeed Gaia, mother of Lumina’s half-sister, the Gaia that had died when her head was cut off, just because she wanted a child.
Everything turned bright, and then they woke up the next day with tears in their eyes. Lumina, after much thought, made a decision, she knew what she had to do to stop all this…

And that is how it would make more sense than BoI.
(Copyright of Binding of Issac game goes to Edmund McMullen and Florian Himsl, Dracona Chronicles to RazorFox, all rights reserved to their individual owners.)

Okay, I’m sorry, but you can’t keep posting this huge manuscript each time. I really appreciate your taking the time to create a fanfic, and I’m sure it’s lovely, but quite frankly, I haven’t read it as I don’t have the time, and I don’t typically make it a point to read fanfics anyway. I’m too busy.

That said, consider this your final warning. I’ll leave up your post so that others can read it, but if you post it again in its entirety, I will have to ban you from my comments section. There are more appropriate places to post fanfics; within the comic’s comments section is not one of those places.

Furthermore, I will not incorporate your fanfic’s elements into my story. My story is MY story, not yours. Asking me to incorporate your story’s elements into mine is tantamount to robbing me of my right to tell the story the way I want to tell it. This is also why I don’t make a habit of reading fanfics–any similarities between my story and anything written in a fanfic becomes pure coincidence.

Finally, no, I will not make a comic adaptation of your fanfic. Do you know how much time it takes for me just to do one “Draconia Chronicles” page? I’m sorry, but no.

I’m sure your fanfic is quite lovely, and that you take a lot of pride in it, or you wouldn’t have posted it at least three times already. As a courtesy, I will leave it up for others to read, but if this pops up again, I will have to use the banhammer for the very first time.

Thanks.

I’m sorry, that will never happen again, but I must tell you, I tried to send you my fanfic through email on my IPad but it looks like you haven’t received it. So I decided to post it all here so you can copy it and paste it onto a word document to have for your own and to share with others, then delete the comment housing all my fanfic so everyone won’t have such a hard time. I’m sorry if I caused any trouble for everyone.
P.S. I wasn’t asking you to incorporate my fanfic into your story, I was offering.

RazorFox, I hope you take time to read this comment but my late Christmas gift to you is a copy of my fanfiction that I don’t know if I’ll finish it. The next comment below houses it and I know it’s long but please copy and paste all of it onto a word document so you can share it with guests, friends, and members. Thank you.
P.S. I want my fanfic to be read by everyone, NOT for members only please!
Also P.S. I would be honored if you incorperated my fanfiction into your work or canon comic or made it into a bonus comic. And try guessing the references! It’s fun! 😉
Mr. E

Lumina and her mother lived in a large castle on a hill, overlooking the Dragon Capital. Lumina was found mostly training to use magicks with her nanny and seemingly only friend, Chiara while other times she kept to herself, usually drawing pictures and playing with her toys and My Little Dracony dolls as her mom ruled the Kingdom of Draconia with a sturdy hand. Life was simple, and they were both happy. That was, until the day Mt. Aet’na Erupted, sending the capital into chaos. At the same time, Kilani- a noble and cunning warrior who was already starting to become disillusioned with the war and with hate in general had invaded the castle and rescued her sister Kess, and her friends Shie and Riah. Pursued by the Queen Oscura, the intruders wandered about in the dungeons until they found Lumina along with an injured Chiara. Trying to defend herself, the young dragoness used her now-voluntary Light magicks in an attempt to ward off the tigers, Kilani though, recognized the girl as her adoptive daughter, whom she hatched and raised Lumina on her own in seclusion, caring for her as if the young dragon was her own. The moment their eyes met, something stirred within the young princess’ mind but quickly faded when Oscura intervened, snapping her back to reality. That night, she fell asleep with that same feeling buzzing about in her head. Days later, she had decided to throw a party, celebrating Chiara’s recovery, but when she drank her “beverage”, blackness and silence overtook her. Oscura, determined to end the war, had commissioned Dr. Lucis to wipe her memory so that the queen could train her to become the ultimate weapon and assure victory against the tiger tribe. Everything was set for the cleansing and looked like the queen was successful. However, a bitter battle between Briella and Lady Red was brought into Lucis’ room, causing everything to go astray. The resulting chaos caused Lucius to not only accidentally restore Lumina’s memories, but also linked the girl’s with Oscura’s. Lumina awoke from her stupor, screaming and backing away in fear from Oscura, exclaiming that she’s a soulless monster that knows no love and Kilani is her real mother, not her. After this heart-breaking out burst, Lumina uses a flash-bang magick attack to stun everyone, then flies off. After grabbing some food and her dolls, she then realizes she has to get out of the castle, however, she finds out she’s cornered in the throne room. Lumina, in a panic, scrambled about in the room, searching for a way out that doesn’t involve flying. Just when she was about to give up, she accidentally pressed a switch which revealed a trapdoor hidden behind the throne. Without hesitation, she ran toward her only means of escape, just as she heard the queen and her guards approaching, and then threw herself down into the unknown depths below. The trapdoor then closed itself, shutting out the source of calm light in the place of darkness. Little does Lumina know is that the failed mind wipe is causing her to have temporary ocular and auditory hallucinations which will force her to face droves of illusionary enemies, a lost sister, her fears, her conflicting memories, Draconia’s sins, and eventually, her “fake” mother…

Actually this story would or will make sense than BoI because…
The adventure would test Lumina’s broken heart to see if she really loves Oscura (despite knowing what she had done) and Kilani at the same time.
The Dracony dolls she brought with her would manifest as parts of her personality, I.e. Velvet Sun being her ‘love’ and compassion, Firestarter being her keen ‘eye’ and ‘quick’ cunning, Windwhistle as her ‘strength’ and courage, Lustershine as ‘both sides’ of her ever-increasing ‘power’ and desperation to seek the truth, and Flashbang as her lonely and ‘gothic’ side. (thumbs up to anyone who gets the allusions to BoIs’ playable characters!)
Lumina facing the Seven Deadly and Super Sins symbolizes her uncertainy that she can bring peace and absolve Draconia’s tribes for their misdeeds.
The Seven Sins take on the forms of various characters throughout the comic, Greed- Riah/Kighan, Sloth- Red/Aika, Envy- Sombrana/Scyde, Wrath- Kess/Xhanil/Elektra, Gluttony- Zurina/Inyx, Lust- Jiva/Rula/Naisha, Pride- Princess Kiriad/Briella/Edmund McMillen and Florian Himsel, and Oscura’s first phase involves using every sin’s moves before transforming into the “Mom” phase.
The Harbingers represent Draconia’s impending doom which Lumina strives to prevent from happening.
Shaliegh’s tent replaces the Devil room but would still follow the same AI, unlock patterns, and symbolism.
The monsters Lumina and “co.” fight symbolize her fears, nightmares, and images of both the tiger and dragon tribes warped from the failed cleansing process.
Lumina eventually meets with Gaia’s daughter locked in a cell and realizes that the lost, mistreated girl is the little sister she wished for due to the memory incident, but the scared and scarred child attacks Lumina (like Issac (boss)) out of fear due to not knowing anything but the princess comforts her using her kind heart and a song. In a touching moment, they both cry in each others’ shoulders, not only because they found each other after 6 years but because they wished everything would go back to normal.
I forgot to mention, Lumina doesn’t use tears as her main weapon, she uses her magick as the main weapon, but she can switch elements to her will, AFTER she finds a desired element.

However, Oscura soon finds the two and some serious stuff happens. (I’ll tell what happens in story form.)

Lumina and her sister were cornered.

Her mother, fueled with rage at seeing her daughter next to Gaia’s illegitimate spawn, was bearing down on them both. “Lumina get the HELL away from that literal spawn of a dritch!” she yelled to the princess. “Move aside!”

The sisters could see their own panic reflected in Oscura’s big, white eyes. Strange how they shared the same eyes; the big, yellow eyes that all of them shared, including the pompadour of brown hair. (Though Lumina’s mother was sporting less curl and more messy bedhead at the moment.)

(Lumina’s POV)
….. Fight…

A voice in her head said.

…Fight…attack her……you idiot, FIGHT…

A hand reached out, vehemently shoving Lumina aside. “I SAID MOVE ASIDE!! That lousy imp can NOT be let out!” The little light dragon tumbled on the floor and landed on her side. Picking herself up, she glanced back, the orange-yellow dragonling let out panicked whimpering noises, eyes fixated on the queen before her, pupils nearly pinpricks as fear and adrenaline coursed through her veins.

The earthie was pinned between Oscura and the wall behind her, chest heaving with heavy gasps. Lumina’s hallucination-filled mind suddenly no longer made her see a loving parent, but a horrific, sadistic monster.

…Fight.

“You …”

(Sister’s POV)
A hand slapped her cheek then grabbed her hair as her attacker uttered unintelligible noises (“You LITTLE BRAT! YOU should have NEVER been BORN!!), then threw her down and delivered a series of punches and kicks before finally grasping her throat with glowing hands, starving her of air.

(Lumina’s POV)
Attack!
“…just get away, getawaygetaway…”

She was hyperventilating by now, as her biological mother choked the feeble dragonling.
DO SOMETHING.
And then an image formed in her mind. An image of a shining, sharp hand; her protector, making a beckoning gesture. The voice within her mind whispered to her like a seductive lover, sounding so wrong but so right at the same time.
K…i…l…l…h…e…r…
Lumina hesitated. Part of her wanted to scream. Another, to take her sister and run. But yet another, considered the request.
…Kill her…..Before she kills your sibling…
Her mind was a maelstrom of conflicting thoughts, the young girl felt sick to her stomach and weak in the knees with the beat of her own heart pounding within her head.
Make…the…we…a…po…n…
She thought the image. Her left hand slowly contorted into a claw, trembling as part of her still warred, still tried to reason.
Make the weapon… Make it… Make it…
Tears streamed down her face, as her left arm gathered light magick and formed it into a clawed gauntlet, as if the frayed strands of her sanity knew what was happening, knew that it was fighting a battle it was going to lose.

DO IT.

She weakly stood up into a battle stance near her mother with shaky arms, her eyelids stained with dry saline, hiccuping between sobs. “Just leave her alone…please, Memei…just *hic* leave my sister alone!”

But Oscura wouldn’t listen or look at her daughter as she continued assaulting the helpless young earth dragon, she just said, “Lumina my sweet, I know you have a kind heart and I am proud of you for that… But I will NOT HAVE YOU ACCEPTING THIS DRITCH’S SPAWN AS YOUR SISTER!!”

She didn’t think. Her body acted on its own.

(Oscura’s POV)
“AAaagh!”
Oscura looked thunderstruck as Lumina heaved, frozen in mid-strike, the phantasmal blades of the magick-gauntlet dripping with red ichor. She collapsed, dropping the young earth dragon who scuttled to a corner. Clutching her stomach and dabbing at the wide cut, she looked at her own blood stained palm in shock.

(Lumina’s POV)
“Ma-Mai-see…wh-” “I told you *hic* to stay away from her… *gasp*…WHY COULDN’T YOU JUS’ STAY AWAY FROM US!? WHY COULDN’T YOU JUS’ LOVE US BOTH!?!?”

Kill her, Lumina…

“N-no, she’s my Memei…I c-can’t…I…I”

…KILL her…and the hurting, …the hurting, will stop…

“P-please…Memei…run…just run…oh gods Memei…*sob*, PLEASE don’t make me do this!”

Argh… KILL HER!!! KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL, KILL, KILL, KILL, KILL, KILL HER, KILL, KILL HER, KILL HER, KILL H-

“YAAAAAAAAGGHHHH!!!!

What happened next was a blur, the memories fuzzy in Lumina’s mind.

(Oscura’s POV)
As Oscura tried to make sense of the sudden attack by her daughter and her odd ramblings, The princess let out a chilling mix between a wail and a scream, catching the queen off-guard as the dragonling lunged forward, spearing through her shoulder, shedding blood as the black dragoness fell to the ground.

Shock and surprise registered on Oscura’s face as she yelled in agony, blood hemorrhaging from that wound, staining her black and purple scales with the red hue of her life essence. She looked up to her daughter’s face and was actually scared by what she saw, Lumina bore a huge scowl and her eyes were angry and colorless whites save for tiny yellow dots with prick-sized pupils, “L-Lumina! WHAT ARE YOU DOING!? D-DON’T! NO!” she let out another swipe and cut her mother’s leg. Again and again that small silver bladed hand struck out, The white dragonling sobbing hysterically as she slashed at her highness again and again.

Through scale, through flesh, Oscura’s struggles slowly faded as her blood was spilt onto the floor of the Dungeon, pooling around her, splattering both the assailant and victim with that hot red fluid. “JUST LEAVE US ALONE!” Lumina screamed out through tears, fear turning to sorrow and rage. “YOU COULDN’T JUS’ GO AWAY, COULD YOU?! *swipe* YOU HAD TO KEEP COMING BACK, *cut* WHY DID’JA LOCK UP MY LITTLE SISTER, *swipe* WHY DID’JA TAKE ME AWAY FROM KILANI, *slash* WHY DID’JA ‘RASE MY MEM’RY *slash*, WHY DIDN’T’JA TELL ME ABOUT SIS’, *jab* WHY DID’JA BULLY HER, *slash* WHY ARE YOU SO MEAN!?!? *swipe* WHY!? *cut* WHY!? *jab* WHYYYYYY!?!?!?!?!?” Oscura tried to use magick to defend herself but her own daughter brought her foot down on her mother’s hand, sending a wave of pain coursing through her entire body, her eyes wide with terror as tears streamed down her face, visage frozen in a mix of fear, pain, and anguish.

Was her daughter right? Was really that horrible and heartless? Was she indeed a monster?

As her vision started to blur, she stared up at Lumina and saw the gauntlet dissipate into magick, but her daughter still acted like the weapon was still on her arm, her strikes grew slower and softer. Mustering some strength, Oscura spoke. “Lumina… PLEASE STOP! IT REALLY HURTS!” (Normally Oscura wouldn’t be the type to beg for mercy, but having her own daughter attack her to the point where she can’t fight back disturbed and horrified her greatly.) She then held up her hand. “Look at me… My body’s cut up badly, and my hand is broken… What should I do? My people are lost without me, they’re your people too, you can’t do this!” Lumina started to look less frightening and more solemn as her mother said the two words she never heard her say, “I’m Sorry… I’m Sorry! I’ll make it all up to you sweetie, I promise!…*whimper* Please Lumina, this isn’t you… I just want my sweet-girl back … Please… *sob* Please Mai-see… forgive me…”
She is lying… DOITDOITDOITDOITDOITDOITDOITDOITNOW!!!!!

Lumina then had an even scarier look on her face as she screamed “You’re lying… YOU’RE LYING! YOU JUS’ WANT TO TAKE CONTR’L OF MY HEAD AND TURN ME INTO A WEP’N OR A BEGITABL’!” Then with every strike, she said only one word. “*whack!* Die… *crack!* Die… *thud!* DIIIEE!!!”
The confused and scared child finally threw a jab that hit Oscura’s head, sending her into unconsciousness.

(Lumina’s POV)
Lumina heaved for breath, limbs shaking as her lucidity returned, making her fully conscious and gasped…

Blood stained her scales and wings, painting her a deep crimson, wearing the life force of her former mother like some Lovecraftian outfit. She sobbed, letting out a wail of anguish as she realized the gravity of what she had just done. Hands held her head, Lumina’s pupils became pinprick-sized. “Nooooo..nononoNONONOOO! I didn’t mean to…oh, no…what have I done?! WHAT DID I DO!?”

Lumina’s body shook as her chest heaved with each gut-wrenching cry of anguish, suddenly stumbling onto her knees, letting out a ear-piercing shriek of terror as the young dragon put her hands out in front of her and saw her palms.

Oscura’s blood and viscera coated them, dripping down through her person, a huge hole on her mother’s head laid before her eyes. She skittered backwards, slipping in the pool of blood of her own creation, slamming cheekfirst into the pile of gore before finally gaining purchase and dragging herself over to the corner from her ex-mother’s still form. She could see the red and feel the stickiness of the substance all over her body as her bladder mutinied on her, emptying its contents upon the floor next to her terrified sister. Her mind raced, thoughts running a mile a minute as she hiccuped, wide, terror filled eyes staring at the scene made by her own hand.

Murder.

She had committed murder. On one of her own mothers. She had killed Queen Oscura. The young princess then burst into tears… It was a living nightmare.

She grasped at her head, matting her brown, disheveled hair down with blood and ichor, the young princess curled into a fetal position on the floor as a frightened look spread across her face, whimpering disjointedly to herself. Voices within her mind clawed and whispered to her, as her fear and illusions reached their peak. Everything started to spin around her as time seemed to stand still for her, the last vestiges of her courage being plucked apart, one by one…until that final thread finally snapped.

Shadows started swirling wildly and everything shrunk and expanded repeatedly as the voices screamed in her head. She then imagined a swarm of arms grabbing her body and in places that made her feel worse as the voices got louder…
*”Sweet GIRL!” “CaALlLl… MEe… BaAaCK!!!” “SWEET girl!”
“You are NOT my sweet girl!” “LUmInA… WhY DiD yOU KiLl ME…?”
“MoNsteR!”*
“Stop…!”
*”You shouldn’t have done that…” “You’ve got no spine! “What have you done with my sweet girl!?” “MURDERER!”*
“I-I’m…not a murderer, it was an accident, I was scared, scared!”
*”Sou-ka…?” “!DlEiMvOeNd!” “The tears won’t stop… the tears won’t stop…”YOU’RE A… CO…WA…RD!” “Eeeeeviiiillll!!!” “Why Lumina…? WhY LumINa? WHY LUMINA!? WHY LUMINA?! HWY ULNIMA?! YWH MILAUN?! LWMAIHYNU?! “DIE…, DIE…, DIIIEE!!!” “One of us, Lumina! Wrath! Envy! Gluttony! Greed! Sloth! Lust! Pride! One of us, Seven Sins! Seven Sins! Draconia’s Sins! Oscura’s Sins! LUMINA’S SINS! SINS! SINS! SIN! SIN! SIN! SINNER! SINNER! SINNER! HAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHA!!!!!!!”*
This was too much for Lumina, as the tortured girl threw her head up high and screamed…
“AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!! MEMEI! MEEEEMEEEEIIII, H-HELP ME! I’M SCARED! AAGH IT HURTS, IT HUURRRTS!! STOP, STOOOOOOOOP… *Sob* *wail* PLEEEEEEEAAASE!!! SHRIIIIIEEEEEEK, KILANIIIIIIII!!!!!!!!!”

(Sister’s POV)
She was scared, this being who was kind to her had killed her tormentor, but started shaking and crying after she did that. Now her savior had curled up on her side, screaming in agony, for reasons she did not know. This frightened the child, now getting a feeling of fear, sympathy, and sadness, shuffled over to her new friend. Not knowing what to do, she suddenly got the familiar wetness in her vision, then nudged the white being while uttering a sound that surprised her. “…N-Ny-Nyuu…Nyuu? Nyuu… Nyuu…!”

(Lumina’s POV)
Just when she thought she was going to die of fright, Lumina felt a familiar warmth on her arm and heard a sound like the coo of a dove, “Nyuu…! Nyuuuu…!” she looked up and saw her sister looking at her with puffy, red, watery eyes, having a distressed look on her face. Lumina looked around, she noticed that the arms disappeared and the voices stopped, herself, her sister, and her mother’s “corpse” were the only ones in the dungeon. Unable to bear it any longer, she grabbed her sister and wept into her shoulder again for what seemed like 5 minutes…

(Sister’s POV)
She was hurt, this being was tormented like herself all this time… She wanted to run when the white thing brusquely wrapped her arms around her, but a mysterious warmth and the same feeling and wetness flowed inside her very being. She buckled to her knees, emitting the same sound as the white being on her shoulder, however, that sound had the power to break hearts… It was a lost baby’s cry… “Nyuuuaaa… Nyaaaa… Aahh…*hic* WAAAHHHH!! WAAAAHHH!! AAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!! AAAAAAAAAHHHHH!!”

Neither of them wanted to let go, but Lumina suddenly heard voices from deep within the dungeon corridors… “This must lead to the source of the noise!” “Perhaps her majesty and the Queen are there!” “I pray we’re not too late!” “Don’t worry Chiara, we’ll find her there!” “Hang on my liege! Help is on the way!” Fearful of what her mother’s friends might say and do to her when they see what happened, Lumina looked at her sister and agreed with her on one thing, they had to get out while they still could. Using her earth magick, Lumina broke a hole in the wall and saw she was on the other side of town, seeing mountains and trees as far as the eyes could see, and for the first time in what felt like a long time, embraced the outside air, feeling its comforting breeze and refreshing coolness. Making sure she still had her dolls with her, she lifted her sister into her arms using newfound strength and sprinted toward the opening, but before she was completely outside, she turned to her mother’s “lifeless” body with tears in her eyes, the sunlight shining behind her while she stood on the rubble. Her voice was barely louder than a whisper. “Goodbye Memei… I’ll miss you… *hic* I’m sorry…!” With that said, she ran faster than ever before despite the extra weight and never looked back, her tears glinting in the evening sunlight as she ran with her sister sleeping in her arms, heading into unknown lands…

Epilogue:
In reality, Oscura was knocked unconscious but Lumina’s hallucinations were so strong she thought she really killed her, Chiara and the other guards had managed to reach the deepest part of the dungeons and were standing next to the last door.
(Chiara): “Ok, it looks like this door leads to the last room, is everyone ready?”
(Kighan): “Chiara, this leads to the queen’s private dungeons! We aren’t allowed in there!”
(Red): “Well have YOU got any BETTER ideas!? We’ve searched everywhere!”
(Shaddig): “Red’s Right! This is the only place left we haven’t looked!”
(Cinder): “Screw the premises! Our majesties’ lives are on the line!”
(Kighan): “Sigh… OK. But don’t blame me if we get fired or worse!”
The team then entered the door and found that something was amiss.
(Shaddig): “Hey, It’s brighter in here than the rest of the dungeon, what gives?”
(Red): “Well we won’t find out standing here, come on!”
But when they eventually found the source, a terrible sight met their eyes…
(Shaddig): “GASP!! MY LEIGE!!!”
(Cinder): “OH GODS, WHERE’S LUMINA!?”
(Kighan): “Who DID this much damage!?”
(Red): “Eeeewwww! What did I just step in!?”
Chiara didn’t say anything, in fact she couldn’t speak. She rushed to the queen’s side to check if she was still alive. “She-She’s alive!”
“Oh thank gods!” “But WHO DID this!?” “Where’s the princess!?” “I don’t know! (is this urine!?) Try reviving her! Maybe we can get some clues! (wait… it’s fresh!)”
Chiara shook and yelled at Oscura to try and rouse her.

(Oscura’s POV)
“Agh… grr… ohh…”
Oscura awoke from a dreamless sleep. Her head was wracked with noise, pain coursed her body, and her vision was blurry. When she regained focus, she found she was still in the dungeon but her guards were by her side, looking at her with terrified but relieved expressions. “…Ch-Chiara… is that… you?”

(Chiara): “Oh thank gods, you’re awake! I thought you were dead!”
(Shaddig): “We heard a commotion and ran toward it as fast as we could!
(Kighan): “I don’t know who did this, but whoever did it shall PAY!”
(Cinder): “My Liege, can you tell us who did this to you?”
Oscura had a pained expression on her face as tears welled up in her eyes…
(Red): “Your majesty?”
Neither one of them could prepare for that moment, nor they would ever forget it…
(Oscura): “*sob* I-It was… *hic* L-*oh gods please let it be a nightmare…*
*gasp* IT WAS LUMINA, LUMINA!!!*wail* MY OWN BABY!!! *SOOB-HOB-HOB-HOOOOOB!!!!*”

(WOW… THAT is some HEAVY dark stuff…)

(Thumbs up to anyone who gets the anime/manga references, video game references, fanfiction references, and movie reference.)

Near the end of the fanfic, legit chapter, or bonus comic, they escape out of the castle and into a nearby forest. The Womb and Utero levels are replaced with the Forest and Lush Eden levels but still follow the same AI (if this was a game or fangame) and rules, but the enemies are replaced with realistic creatures than the womb and Utero enemies (same AI and programming) from BoI. (and the music Atempause is remixed to music you would hear while walking through an enchanted forest.)
They fall asleep after traveling far when night falls, but they both dream together.
They first dream of the Khalira, but as a Sheol-like place which is fitting considering the number of skeletons, this symbolizes that Lumina is tormented by the “horrible thing she did”, even though parts of the event were hallucinations.
The boss of the Khalira is Shaleigh, who starts off the battle by summoning a “Fallen” tiger then a “Fallen” dragon. After they are beaten, Shaleigh, shocks and horrifies the royal twins by transforming into Satan (in his BoI appearance no less!) and attacks the duo! This heavily hints that Oscura, Kiriad, and possibly many others had bargained with Shaleigh(Satan) and unkowingly wound up “selling their souls to the Devil”, all not knowing the fact that she(he) wants to rule all of Draconia! The Fallen Dragon and Fallen Tiger enemies represent the ghosts of dead tigers and dragons killed in battle that had dealed with Shaleigh(Satan) and are forced to “serve her(him)” for eternity.

After they beat Shaleigh(Satan), they then dream of the castle, but as a Cathedral which not only means the young dragons want to be together in the afterlife just in case they get killed during the war, but because Lumina feels like she is being judged for her actions by her ancestors.
The Angel room is replaced with Loessa’s Room but still follows the same AI and rules, except Loessa is found caressing an “unknown” angel in her arms.
The Issac battle is replaced, instead, the duo fights the “Daddy” Long Legs. At the end of the battle, the “Daddy” Long Legs coughs up a half of an orb then leaves, revealing a cell-door. This means that the “Daddy” Long Legs wanted to test Lumina and her Sister’s power.
The final dream involves the two exploring the cell that held Lumina’s half-sister, battling nightmare creatures, sins, and eventually, Lumina’s rising dark side.
After the chaotic battle, a glowing chest appears in place where Lumina’s evil was along with the other half of the mysterious orb, they put it together and it floats toward the chest and unlocks it, revealing a swath of light that envelops the two.

As soon as the light cleared up, they found themselves in a grassy field covered with flowers, wondering where they are. Not long after they thought that, the twins found the chest under a bonsai tree, alongside an Earth dragon; but this Earth dragon seemed pale and bright, giving her an angel-like appearance, she flew toward the twins and landed next to them. They were filled with fear but the angel comforted them in a soothing voice that seemed to be filled with sadness. “Shh… There there, don’t be afraid little ones.” The duo felt calmer then, but Lumina’s sister was curious, this angel looked a lot like her! Lumina, being inquisitive, asked “Who are you? In response, the angel handed Lumina a picture diary, then said, “Here, this will explain everything.”
The first page was of Lumina and Kilani, looking happy together without a care in the world. Lumina shook, trying to wipe away the tears that had fallen from her face non-stop throughout this nightmare. What she wouldn’t give to return to those days.
The next page was of her mom and dad, on a pleasant outing. Her father, a great elder dragon, and her mother, just as lovely as ever. She seemed a bit fuller-figured, even by typical mom standards. Lumina and her sister looked closer at the page, it said “Just found out we’re expecting! Six months ’til our egg comes, I can’t wait!”
Lumina couldn’t help but chuckle as the diary followed her train of memory. The next page was of Chiara and her, in a golden necklace, with sparkling pink garments and a crown to match. “I’m so proud of pip…She’s the cutest thing ever!”
She stared forever at the last few words scrawled on the back of her pageant page. “I love you, Pip!” She could almost hear her now, feel her wet kisses and extra-warm hugs as she would smile down at her. She was far from popular at school – hated, even, by the local bullies – but Mom was always there for her, despite what happened next, she still sharply remembered that day… She had tried to tune out their argument with her pictures, but had no choice but to listen when Oscura stormed over her, stepping on the picture she spent so long coloring. Harsh accusations and angry words were everywhere, something about Chiaras’ not her mother, rainbow eggs and not fitting for a princess. She even smashed the crown Lumina had worked so hard to win at the pageant…
She had chased her, imprisoned her lost sister in the deepest dungeon, tried to erase her memory…and yet, she still loved her, even though her own daughter killed her.
Granted, life was rough…even ignoring the Volcano thing. She didn’t have friends, and she wasn’t particularly good at much besides coloring and telling stories. But was that really enough to drill this look of sadness onto her face during certain nights?
Lumina nearly choked on the lump in her throat when the next pages turned. It showed her father yelling at her mother, gloomily staring, then watching him fly away, out of her life forever.
He called Oscura a tyrant; a sinner. Then he flew away, and she never saw him again.
The note on the page was a bit longer. “Dear Lumina, I’ll always love you, no matter what anyone says. Don’t let your father upset you – Mommy’s always here. XOXO”
If only that were true.
Lumina nearly dropped the book in fright when the next page turned. It was Oscura, with murder in her eyes and a figure’s throat in her hands. Quickly pushing the image away, she closed the book abruptly.
They wanted to stop looking, but felt the cold, but comforting hands of the angel on their shoulders. The angel nudged the diary. There were more pages. The story was not yet over.
The next page drove a cold chill up their spines, the page was of a figure that looked like the angel…but was in chains while a fight was occurring in the picture.
Lumina showed the picture to the angel. “What’s this?” she asked.
The angel made a flipping motion with her hand, as if signifying that her response was on the next page.
“What did I do wrong? What do I do? Where can I hide? All I wanted was a child to love and raise as my own! Dear Goddess, I’m not ready to die!”
When they looked up, the angel was gone, and there was one page left. It was a picture of the angel, curled up in a ball, crying and alone in a place that looked like the
Cathedral. There was only a single tear-stained sentence written: “What have I done?”
With the pages read, they turned their attention to the chest. It was a fine piece of construction – wood panels, with heavy steel along the top and corners to keep it sturdy, all brushed a sparkling gold, with a cross on the top…
That’s when Lumina realized the chest was the angel’s only home, because this was no chest… This, was a coffin.
In a panic, Lumina’s sister flung the top open. Inside, they found the angel, lying with her hands on her chest, just like a person in death.
And in that perfect moment, it all made sense. “…YOU’RE Gaia, aren’t you?”
“…Yes…”
The angel looked at them both from the inside, a sorry look in her dead, tearing-up eyes as she gave a solemn nod. No wonder her face carried that pale tint and her neck was red – it was the look of decapitation. This angel was indeed Gaia, mother of Lumina’s half-sister, the Gaia that had died when her head was cut off, just because she wanted a child.
Everything turned bright, and then they woke up the next day with tears in their eyes. Lumina, after much thought, made a decision, she knew what she had to do to stop all this…

And that is how it would make more sense than BoI.
(Copyright of Binding of Issac game goes to Edmund McMullen and Florian Himsl, Dracona Chronicles to RazorFox, all rights reserved to their individual owners.)

Okay, I’m sorry, but you can’t keep posting this huge manuscript each time. I really appreciate your taking the time to create a fanfic, and I’m sure it’s lovely, but quite frankly, I haven’t read it as I don’t have the time, and I don’t typically make it a point to read fanfics anyway. I’m too busy.

That said, consider this your final warning. I’ll leave up your post so that others can read it, but if you post it again in its entirety, I will have to ban you from my comments section. There are more appropriate places to post fanfics; within the comic’s comments section is not one of those places.

Furthermore, I will not incorporate your fanfic’s elements into my story. My story is MY story, not yours. Asking me to incorporate your story’s elements into mine is tantamount to robbing me of my right to tell the story the way I want to tell it. This is also why I don’t make a habit of reading fanfics–any similarities between my story and anything written in a fanfic becomes pure coincidence.

Finally, no, I will not make a comic adaptation of your fanfic. Do you know how much time it takes for me just to do one “Draconia Chronicles” page? I’m sorry, but no.

I’m sure your fanfic is quite lovely, and that you take a lot of pride in it, or you wouldn’t have posted it at least three times already. As a courtesy, I will leave it up for others to read, but if this pops up again, I will have to use the banhammer for the very first time.

Thanks.

I’m sorry, that will never happen again, but I must tell you, I tried to send you my fanfic through email on my IPad but it looks like you haven’t received it. So I decided to post it all here so you can copy it and paste it onto a word document to have for your own and to share with others, then delete the comment housing all my fanfic so everyone won’t have such a hard time. I’m sorry if I caused any trouble for everyone.
P.S. I wasn’t asking you to incorporate my fanfic into your story, I was offering.

Dayum, man! That was some intense stuff. What a way to start off the New Year. I’m just sorry it’s at Briella’s expense. I can’t help but feel Lady Red’s inaction is do to a lot of those comments “hitting home”, if you know what I mean…

Dayum, man! That was some intense stuff. What a way to start off the New Year. I’m just sorry it’s at Briella’s expense. I can’t help but feel Lady Red’s inaction is do to a lot of those comments “hitting home”, if you know what I mean…

Dayum, man! That was some intense stuff. What a way to start off the New Year. I’m just sorry it’s at Briella’s expense. I can’t help but feel Lady Red’s inaction is do to a lot of those comments “hitting home”, if you know what I mean…

So the dragon civil war begins

I don’t know about a civil war, but Lady Red certainly has a very vocal critic in her face.

Wow Brillie is going to regret this. I wonder will this result in her being exiled and maybe she has a chance encounter with kilanni who try to heal her wounds and brielle at first try to be her friend to turn her in to regain favor with the queen and to survive, but as time went on the two got to know eachother kilianni kindness changed her mind and views of tigers and the war and she become a supporter of peace and coexistence. optimistic i know but i dare dream. Also(dan green voice) Brielle use dark magic attack!!!!!

Well I am starting to make a fan fiction on my but i am putting it on fur iffinity

Well I am starting to make a fan fiction on my but i am putting it on fur iffinity

Well I am starting to make a fan fiction on my but i am putting it on fur iffinity

I’ll have to say Briella’s accusations here sound almost purely based on a biased view compairable to asking the Klu Klux Klan what their opinion on the US president Obama is, (which given the way the dragons are seperated power rank and appearence wise based on “race” it would interesting to see how “racism” views and actions work in the dragons society we already know its there given how the earth dragons were/”are?” treated)

And while as you pointed out to maverikat some of these accusations may be true its also interesting to think of which (and how each was truely done) of these are true there are many negitive and positive ways of viewing the scenes of all the insulting accusations Briella made

And cruiously as others have pointed out Lady Red STILL hasnt reacted or defended herself yet could this be another case of something i pointed out before of Lady Red being obsessed with her work could she also be acting similarly to trying to prove a point to Xhanil that dragons shouldnt let their emotions control their actions and therefore because her work says she needs to provide a good influence to the soldiers in training therefore because of the subject she’s just going to accept being beaten around like a dust filled rug by Briella because she believes thats what her job requires her to do xD

I’ll have to say Briella’s accusations here sound almost purely based on a biased view compairable to asking the Klu Klux Klan what their opinion on the US president Obama is, (which given the way the dragons are seperated power rank and appearence wise based on “race” it would interesting to see how “racism” views and actions work in the dragons society we already know its there given how the earth dragons were/”are?” treated)

And while as you pointed out to maverikat some of these accusations may be true its also interesting to think of which (and how each was truely done) of these are true there are many negitive and positive ways of viewing the scenes of all the insulting accusations Briella made

And cruiously as others have pointed out Lady Red STILL hasnt reacted or defended herself yet could this be another case of something i pointed out before of Lady Red being obsessed with her work could she also be acting similarly to trying to prove a point to Xhanil that dragons shouldnt let their emotions control their actions and therefore because her work says she needs to provide a good influence to the soldiers in training therefore because of the subject she’s just going to accept being beaten around like a dust filled rug by Briella because she believes thats what her job requires her to do xD

I’ll have to say Briella’s accusations here sound almost purely based on a biased view compairable to asking the Klu Klux Klan what their opinion on the US president Obama is, (which given the way the dragons are seperated power rank and appearence wise based on “race” it would interesting to see how “racism” views and actions work in the dragons society we already know its there given how the earth dragons were/”are?” treated)

And while as you pointed out to maverikat some of these accusations may be true its also interesting to think of which (and how each was truely done) of these are true there are many negitive and positive ways of viewing the scenes of all the insulting accusations Briella made

And cruiously as others have pointed out Lady Red STILL hasnt reacted or defended herself yet could this be another case of something i pointed out before of Lady Red being obsessed with her work could she also be acting similarly to trying to prove a point to Xhanil that dragons shouldnt let their emotions control their actions and therefore because her work says she needs to provide a good influence to the soldiers in training therefore because of the subject she’s just going to accept being beaten around like a dust filled rug by Briella because she believes thats what her job requires her to do xD

…Ouch.

…Ouch.

…Ouch.

An honor and privilege with Electra?

I bet it was if you were added to her bar tab.

Sombra a Military genius? Great and powerful?

More like petty and vain. She couldn’t even see past her own narrow minded hate to save her own ass.

As for Red, she managed to get a fire dragons to were they wanted to be and if it wasn’t for them being there or for red than the city would have been burned down completely when the volcano erupted.

Briella’s words are some of the most tripe filled crap Ive herd thus fare. Sorry but she’s lost all pity in my eyes. I’m only guessing who threw that blow torched off metal bar. But ive hade enough of this dribble. KICK BRIELLA’S ASS ALREADY!!!

An honor and privilege with Electra?

I bet it was if you were added to her bar tab.

Sombra a Military genius? Great and powerful?

More like petty and vain. She couldn’t even see past her own narrow minded hate to save her own ass.

As for Red, she managed to get a fire dragons to were they wanted to be and if it wasn’t for them being there or for red than the city would have been burned down completely when the volcano erupted.

Briella’s words are some of the most tripe filled crap Ive herd thus fare. Sorry but she’s lost all pity in my eyes. I’m only guessing who threw that blow torched off metal bar. But ive hade enough of this dribble. KICK BRIELLA’S ASS ALREADY!!!

An honor and privilege with Electra?

I bet it was if you were added to her bar tab.

Sombra a Military genius? Great and powerful?

More like petty and vain. She couldn’t even see past her own narrow minded hate to save her own ass.

As for Red, she managed to get a fire dragons to were they wanted to be and if it wasn’t for them being there or for red than the city would have been burned down completely when the volcano erupted.

Briella’s words are some of the most tripe filled crap Ive herd thus fare. Sorry but she’s lost all pity in my eyes. I’m only guessing who threw that blow torched off metal bar. But ive hade enough of this dribble. KICK BRIELLA’S ASS ALREADY!!!

I think Lady Red is a bit too angelic for her own good. In my opinion, she should have just kicked Briella’s scaly ass instead of trying to reason with her.

She’s killing her with kindness.

I think Lady Red is a bit too angelic for her own good. In my opinion, she should have just kicked Briella’s scaly ass instead of trying to reason with her.

She’s killing her with kindness.

what a jerk, just as briella’s about to land the finishing blow, some random person off screen distracts her and knocks her out. is there no justice or honor in fights anymore?

The random person is Xhianil. She burned through one of the bars of her cell and threw it at Briella. See the white hot tips?

Defiantlythe way I would have done it. Kick there ass first then reason and talk while there at yore feet.

Well, I knew the tigers and the dragons had their respective disagreements, but it seems more prevalent with the dragons. Seriously, if it’s not the fire dragons, it’s the lightning or the light, or the earth dragons. Although, to be fair, the earth dragons had it way worse than any other element (based on observations from the series).

*Jokingly*
Groan…I wanted to see some good old a%# whooping…I mean…please don’t hurt me 🙁

You wouldn’t like Briella when she’s angry… o_O

Or would I? Wait…would I?

Also, I’m guessing here, but I believe the recent convict just save her (I’m assuming that the bar is actually melted prison bars but not sure. Truthfully, shouldn’t the tips be more melted or is it just the angle?).

I wasn’t sure how melted to depict the bar. I wanted the bar to do the damage, not the molten metal. The “RUNK!” sound effect was inserted as a last-minute add to show that the bar still required some force to pull off, so maybe she just softened it up a bit without outright melting it.

The Draconia Chronicles
The gargoyles journey
Once there was a earth dragon name gaia who served The dragon realm one day she wanted a child so she had an affair
with the queens consort . Several months she caught got was beaten for and tortured for 2 years had her magics stripped and sentenced to exile for dead. She tried to escape but she got caught in the cross fire taken by the dragons enemy the tigers
She pleaded to be spared the lightning dragon mercenaries show no pity so the tiger warrior cut her head off . The carcass left and abandond by a tree the carcass rot but something unexpected happen . Poor gaia all she wanted was a child but she commited a crime
against royal decree and she know the severe consequences of her actions the Gods also gave her a blessing the blood of her neck flowed
onto the mountain ground the blood soaked beneath the earth the rocks came out and sprang like grass jagged teeth rocks sprouted out than it cracked and crumbled. The day was wet and rainy the crumbling rocks sank into the mud and then formed and molded into eggs not oval eggs like a dragon but rounded ball like shapes of eggs thirteen of the objects . Than the head girgled blood the blood soaked beneath the mud and formed into a glump of clay it mold and twisted right up into a huge pillar The sun rose the bright sun rays shoned at the pillar .The clay harden solid brown than in a blink of and eye it started to crack than a turqoise greenish arm came out . Another came out two huge cape bat like wings sprouted out of the sunlight than the whole piller cracked and exploded into many tiny peaces and out came a gargoyle name Maya

The rest of the story is at fur infinity just click sulka I already drawn the characters i am still practicing with my art work but like wise man told me just keep practicing every artist never has a ending to his or her skills

I think Lady Red is a bit too angelic for her own good. In my opinion, she should have just kicked Briella’s scaly ass instead of trying to reason with her.

She’s killing her with kindness.

I didn’t threw that; I wasn’t watching!

I didn’t threw that; I wasn’t watching!

Wow Brillie is going to regret this. I wonder will this result in her being exiled and maybe she has a chance encounter with kilanni who try to heal her wounds and brielle at first try to be her friend to turn her in to regain favor with the queen and to survive, but as time went on the two got to know eachother kilianni kindness changed her mind and views of tigers and the war and she become a supporter of peace and coexistence. optimistic i know but i dare dream. Also(dan green voice) Brielle use dark magic attack!!!!!

It was almost super effective!

Wow Brillie is going to regret this. I wonder will this result in her being exiled and maybe she has a chance encounter with kilanni who try to heal her wounds and brielle at first try to be her friend to turn her in to regain favor with the queen and to survive, but as time went on the two got to know eachother kilianni kindness changed her mind and views of tigers and the war and she become a supporter of peace and coexistence. optimistic i know but i dare dream. Also(dan green voice) Brielle use dark magic attack!!!!!

It was almost super effective!

what a jerk, just as briella’s about to land the finishing blow, some random person off screen distracts her and knocks her out. is there no justice or honor in fights anymore?

what a jerk, just as briella’s about to land the finishing blow, some random person off screen distracts her and knocks her out. is there no justice or honor in fights anymore?

Well, I knew the tigers and the dragons had their respective disagreements, but it seems more prevalent with the dragons. Seriously, if it’s not the fire dragons, it’s the lightning or the light, or the earth dragons. Although, to be fair, the earth dragons had it way worse than any other element (based on observations from the series).

*Jokingly*
Groan…I wanted to see some good old a%# whooping…I mean…please don’t hurt me 🙁

You wouldn’t like Briella when she’s angry… o_O

Or would I? Wait…would I?

Also, I’m guessing here, but I believe the recent convict just save her (I’m assuming that the bar is actually melted prison bars but not sure. Truthfully, shouldn’t the tips be more melted or is it just the angle?).

I wasn’t sure how melted to depict the bar. I wanted the bar to do the damage, not the molten metal. The “RUNK!” sound effect was inserted as a last-minute add to show that the bar still required some force to pull off, so maybe she just softened it up a bit without outright melting it.

Well, I knew the tigers and the dragons had their respective disagreements, but it seems more prevalent with the dragons. Seriously, if it’s not the fire dragons, it’s the lightning or the light, or the earth dragons. Although, to be fair, the earth dragons had it way worse than any other element (based on observations from the series).

*Jokingly*
Groan…I wanted to see some good old a%# whooping…I mean…please don’t hurt me 🙁

You wouldn’t like Briella when she’s angry… o_O

Or would I? Wait…would I?

Also, I’m guessing here, but I believe the recent convict just save her (I’m assuming that the bar is actually melted prison bars but not sure. Truthfully, shouldn’t the tips be more melted or is it just the angle?).

I wasn’t sure how melted to depict the bar. I wanted the bar to do the damage, not the molten metal. The “RUNK!” sound effect was inserted as a last-minute add to show that the bar still required some force to pull off, so maybe she just softened it up a bit without outright melting it.

well since i’m pro-sombrana/elektra, It’s good to let bri vent some steam. and I get the feeling she’ll actually be arrested for talking fondly of said characters, rather than her physical behaviour. I swear whatever happened it’s some muddy s*** that’s gonna make me dislike the obscured queen and unlady red >_<

well since i’m pro-sombrana/elektra, It’s good to let bri vent some steam. and I get the feeling she’ll actually be arrested for talking fondly of said characters, rather than her physical behaviour. I swear whatever happened it’s some muddy s*** that’s gonna make me dislike the obscured queen and unlady red >_<

well since i’m pro-sombrana/elektra, It’s good to let bri vent some steam. and I get the feeling she’ll actually be arrested for talking fondly of said characters, rather than her physical behaviour. I swear whatever happened it’s some muddy s*** that’s gonna make me dislike the obscured queen and unlady red >_<

Well Briella looks like you have pushed your luck a little too much.

Well Briella looks like you have pushed your luck a little too much.

This new page is really cool, I like it specially in 3 and 4 panel and Briella look nice with longer hair.

But bring me a lot of questions, mainly in her relationship with Sombra, I wonder if Briella actually know her more close or she always see and admire Sombrana for far away, because for the way she talk it look like Briella admire blindly Sombrana, not knowing how she actually is, plus on the first panel look more like she is looking her from fa away.

Plus she caller Sombrana a military genious, but honesly nobody can be a “The greatest military mind” and get caught by the enemy… twice! But I guess the like for Sombrana is because she and Briella share some part of their personality in common, and thats their arrogance (but with Sombrana is mixed with anger) that clearly emerge here with all that the mortal called from the gods to kick your ass, seriously you must have a huge ego to think that.

Anyway Briella still make me lol a bit and I like character with clear flaws. To be honest this turn on things make me wish to see her been kicked really hard, but by Xhianil, not Red. Lets see what happend next week!

This new page is really cool, I like it specially in 3 and 4 panel and Briella look nice with longer hair.

But bring me a lot of questions, mainly in her relationship with Sombra, I wonder if Briella actually know her more close or she always see and admire Sombrana for far away, because for the way she talk it look like Briella admire blindly Sombrana, not knowing how she actually is, plus on the first panel look more like she is looking her from fa away.

Plus she caller Sombrana a military genious, but honesly nobody can be a “The greatest military mind” and get caught by the enemy… twice! But I guess the like for Sombrana is because she and Briella share some part of their personality in common, and thats their arrogance (but with Sombrana is mixed with anger) that clearly emerge here with all that the mortal called from the gods to kick your ass, seriously you must have a huge ego to think that.

Anyway Briella still make me lol a bit and I like character with clear flaws. To be honest this turn on things make me wish to see her been kicked really hard, but by Xhianil, not Red. Lets see what happend next week!

This new page is really cool, I like it specially in 3 and 4 panel and Briella look nice with longer hair.

But bring me a lot of questions, mainly in her relationship with Sombra, I wonder if Briella actually know her more close or she always see and admire Sombrana for far away, because for the way she talk it look like Briella admire blindly Sombrana, not knowing how she actually is, plus on the first panel look more like she is looking her from fa away.

Plus she caller Sombrana a military genious, but honesly nobody can be a “The greatest military mind” and get caught by the enemy… twice! But I guess the like for Sombrana is because she and Briella share some part of their personality in common, and thats their arrogance (but with Sombrana is mixed with anger) that clearly emerge here with all that the mortal called from the gods to kick your ass, seriously you must have a huge ego to think that.

Anyway Briella still make me lol a bit and I like character with clear flaws. To be honest this turn on things make me wish to see her been kicked really hard, but by Xhianil, not Red. Lets see what happend next week!

I love the visual effect of Briella’s last attack set-up.

I love the visual effect of Briella’s last attack set-up.

I love the visual effect of Briella’s last attack set-up.

well i finished the first page of the fan fiction its on fur infinity hope you like it razor fox

Welp, time to add Briella to my hate list xD; Arrogance and vanity is one thing, thats forgivable, but when you go using ‘divine retribution’ as an excuse for your own petty opinions and your own violent actions then thats the point where I dislike them XD

Welp, time to add Briella to my hate list xD; Arrogance and vanity is one thing, thats forgivable, but when you go using ‘divine retribution’ as an excuse for your own petty opinions and your own violent actions then thats the point where I dislike them XD

Welp, time to add Briella to my hate list xD; Arrogance and vanity is one thing, thats forgivable, but when you go using ‘divine retribution’ as an excuse for your own petty opinions and your own violent actions then thats the point where I dislike them XD

The Draconia Chronicles
The gargoyles journey
Once there was a earth dragon name gaia who served The dragon realm one day she wanted a child so she had an affair
with the queens consort . Several months she caught got was beaten for and tortured for 2 years had her magics stripped and sentenced to exile for dead. She tried to escape but she got caught in the cross fire taken by the dragons enemy the tigers
She pleaded to be spared the lightning dragon mercenaries show no pity so the tiger warrior cut her head off . The carcass left and abandond by a tree the carcass rot but something unexpected happen . Poor gaia all she wanted was a child but she commited a crime
against royal decree and she know the severe consequences of her actions the Gods also gave her a blessing the blood of her neck flowed
onto the mountain ground the blood soaked beneath the earth the rocks came out and sprang like grass jagged teeth rocks sprouted out than it cracked and crumbled. The day was wet and rainy the crumbling rocks sank into the mud and then formed and molded into eggs not oval eggs like a dragon but rounded ball like shapes of eggs thirteen of the objects . Than the head girgled blood the blood soaked beneath the mud and formed into a glump of clay it mold and twisted right up into a huge pillar The sun rose the bright sun rays shoned at the pillar .The clay harden solid brown than in a blink of and eye it started to crack than a turqoise greenish arm came out . Another came out two huge cape bat like wings sprouted out of the sunlight than the whole piller cracked and exploded into many tiny peaces and out came a gargoyle name Maya

The rest of the story is at fur infinity just click sulka I already drawn the characters i am still practicing with my art work but like wise man told me just keep practicing every artist never has a ending to his or her skills

The Draconia Chronicles
The gargoyles journey
Once there was a earth dragon name gaia who served The dragon realm one day she wanted a child so she had an affair
with the queens consort . Several months she caught got was beaten for and tortured for 2 years had her magics stripped and sentenced to exile for dead. She tried to escape but she got caught in the cross fire taken by the dragons enemy the tigers
She pleaded to be spared the lightning dragon mercenaries show no pity so the tiger warrior cut her head off . The carcass left and abandond by a tree the carcass rot but something unexpected happen . Poor gaia all she wanted was a child but she commited a crime
against royal decree and she know the severe consequences of her actions the Gods also gave her a blessing the blood of her neck flowed
onto the mountain ground the blood soaked beneath the earth the rocks came out and sprang like grass jagged teeth rocks sprouted out than it cracked and crumbled. The day was wet and rainy the crumbling rocks sank into the mud and then formed and molded into eggs not oval eggs like a dragon but rounded ball like shapes of eggs thirteen of the objects . Than the head girgled blood the blood soaked beneath the mud and formed into a glump of clay it mold and twisted right up into a huge pillar The sun rose the bright sun rays shoned at the pillar .The clay harden solid brown than in a blink of and eye it started to crack than a turqoise greenish arm came out . Another came out two huge cape bat like wings sprouted out of the sunlight than the whole piller cracked and exploded into many tiny peaces and out came a gargoyle name Maya

The rest of the story is at fur infinity just click sulka I already drawn the characters i am still practicing with my art work but like wise man told me just keep practicing every artist never has a ending to his or her skills

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